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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2001-01-12 09:23 PM



The Prisoner

Shivering in darkness by a stone prison wall
Shivering in darkness by a stone prison wall
He lies alone on the floor breathing must from the hall
He lies alone on the floor breathing must from the hall
Shivering on the floor by a prison wall in stone
He lies breathing the hall must from darkess alone

Walls too solid and high for a glimmer of light
Walls too solid and high for a glimmer of light
But the mind is not a prisoner to gates in the night
But the mind is not a prisoner to gates in the night
Too solid the high gates, and not a glimmer of  light
The mind is but a prisoner to walls of the night


Open windows of a thought always soar to be free
Open windows of a thought always soar to be free
To sweet petal of rose if the mind let it be
To sweet petal of rose if the mind let it be
If petal of a sweet rose always thought to be free
To soar open windows of the mind, let it be

If petal of rose be not a prisoner of the walls
But a glimmer of light breathing in must from the hall
It is by a wall of the mind, too solid to soar
He lies shivering alone on a stone prison floor
Let the high gates to darkness for the mind always be
Night windows to sweet thought, open and free

Elizabeth Santos

© Copyright 2001 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2001-01-12 09:28 PM


The mind can be the harshest prison of all. Very well done, Elizabeth!

Denise

tracie66
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2 posted 2001-01-12 09:35 PM


Oh my Liz, this my friend is fantastic...great effort indeed, you have penned an icredible write here...well done
~HUG~
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Sunshine
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3 posted 2001-01-12 09:38 PM


This is absolutely beautiful, but those words shall be said again, and again...whenever you  pen...
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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4 posted 2001-01-12 09:40 PM


No one can do it like you, Liz! Here you are with an incredibly sad poem, with exquisite wording, and still, you manage to put on an ending with a hope!

Beautifully written, my friend!

My prayers remain with you and yours.

.


The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G.


lucky
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5 posted 2001-01-12 09:45 PM


Dizzy lizzie,

You do know that I'm a musician and this could really sing... it's a bit off your usual but it sure caught me... I think I'll record it somewhere around June... I'll let you know about royalties later... love

dale


Beckalini
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6 posted 2001-01-12 09:53 PM


This is amazing! I wish my mind soared to the places yours does that so inspire such wonderful poetry. Truly amazing!  
~Becky~

Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 2001-01-12 10:21 PM


THis paradelle made me dizzy alright. It's a kind of once every 6 months kind of poem. Thank you all for your remarks. It made the effort worthwhile
Liz

Sunshine
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8 posted 2001-01-29 11:25 PM


I still cannot do one of these...
it takes a brilliant pen,
and a more brilliant poet...

so let this shine!

Martie
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9 posted 2001-01-29 11:35 PM


Liz--This is so haunting, so rich...has the feel of a finely woven tapestry.  Beautifully done!!
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