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lucky
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Idaho

0 posted 2001-01-12 09:05 AM


in the north when eagle
winter's claw latches to keep the law
of nature in control the poor rabbit onto the
dining table goes then sha-zam and the critter
in minuets is gone never to be seen or heard
again no one knows how mother flew the
sky for ours looking for the best-buy
and biggest deal around they
don’t care that she
flew four
hours
in the
air around
town just for their

meal of hare then when the
darn short-tailed Leporidae was
gone mom had to mosey on over
to Jack in the Box for something
I think she said was called
a...... finch fry

~ ~ ~

it was one of those
days that Rosemary and
myself slaved in the kitchen
for hours and by the time
we sat down to eat
there was not
a morsel
left
~


[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 01-12-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Dale W. Gwaltney - All Rights Reserved
Beckalini
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since 2001-01-02
Posts 151
Yorkshire, England
1 posted 2001-01-12 09:15 AM


Gosh lucky, I really love the layout of this piece! And the words themselves are brilliant. I love how you're able to give the simplest of situations a mystical air. Perfect!
*Hugs*,
Becky

lucky
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
2 posted 2001-01-12 12:50 PM


Thank you Becky,

I'll try an get an "e" off to you with more of our stuff. I don't get much response here other than Marge Tindal and Martie. Nice to see a new face...

Hugs to you too... dale

Martie
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3 posted 2001-01-12 01:36 PM


Hi lucky...now you have made me hungry...for haire and fince fries...and some more of your memories...can I come over for dinner?
Charisma
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lost in blue pages
4 posted 2001-01-12 03:23 PM


wonderful penned....love the imagery inhere...and also the form.
excellent work


Charisma

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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northern mountains, Idaho
5 posted 2001-01-12 09:24 PM


Very clever - sometimes you can make me laugh so hard!  (Martie too - grin!) You have told the story of the truth of the matter with your own, inimitable humor and style!  I don't think anyone could ever match it!

passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2003-01-27 12:00 PM


clever indeed...very creative write!
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2008-05-06 02:26 AM


*chuckling*

I miss you lucky.

come back???


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