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Sand-Walking

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jwesley
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0 posted 01-11-2001 11:06 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for jwesley


Sand-Walking

Sometimes she'd take my breathe away
when she smiled.
We'd go sand-walking
and her footprints would linger
far longer than mine,
the sand holding her close
as long as it could.
We'd hold hands,
sit on the rocks,
watch the sun set,
listen to seagulls hidden in the dark,
waves breaking on the rocks below,
the sea rubbing it's cheek on the sand.
Moonlight would touch her hair,
angel-glow her cheeks;
sometimes we'd sit all night
whispered words keeping us close,
holding the moment,
lingering over the feeling
that we were essential to the whole.
Sometimes she'd take my breathe away,
as now,
while sand-walking I spread her essence
between the sand and the sea,
returning her forever,
to sand-walking,
through eternity.


w.  james beard, jr.
January 2001





[This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 01-12-2001).]
© Copyright 2001 Wesley James Beard, Jr. - All Rights Reserved
Krawdad
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1 posted 01-11-2001 11:34 PM       View Profile for Krawdad   Email Krawdad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krawdad

jwesley,

When a smile is forever . . .
I really like this piece, well done!

And I know this woman . . . her smile.

Krawdad
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2 posted 01-12-2001 12:51 AM       View Profile for Poeminister   Email Poeminister   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poeminister's Home Page   View IP for Poeminister

Jwesley--Lovely write.  Enjoyed the read.

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VAS
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3 posted 01-12-2001 01:03 AM       View Profile for VAS   Email VAS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for VAS

Absolutely tender and beautiful.
It seems to me, though the responses of the others lead me to believe they did not see the same thing as I did, but it seems that you have had to completely let her go the 'sand-walking for eternity.'  My perception is that her ashes have joined the sand and the sea.  Is this your intent; is this what really had to happen for you and her?  Powerfully poignant closure.
Paula Finn
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4 posted 01-12-2001 01:11 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

Like Vas...I too read it as she was gone...one again with the sand and sea...beautifully written
Lady Lightning
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5 posted 01-12-2001 01:27 AM       View Profile for Lady Lightning   Email Lady Lightning   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady Lightning

Yes, Like VAS and Paula I got the same impression..You let her go to the sand for all eternity...This is a lovely, though sad poem ....I really liked it... Hugs... ~LL~

The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown
Krawdad
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6 posted 01-12-2001 01:47 AM       View Profile for Krawdad   Email Krawdad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krawdad

Not THAT clueless, ok?
"When a smile is FOREVER", she is gone.
And having said that, "I know this (universal) woman . . . her smile".

BTDT
Mark Bohannan
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7 posted 01-12-2001 01:53 AM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

James...as usual you paint such tender and lovely images and recollections with your words.  Only one that was truely caught up in the moment could do that and then bring it to us to share so wonderfully.  This shows the love and commitment that you are willing to give and share.  Excellent piece my friend.
jwesley
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8 posted 01-12-2001 10:32 AM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Thank you all for the read and words.  VAS was dead on (no pun meant here) with the read, but I read krawdad's "smile" the way it was meant too.  This is what makes it even more "fun" isn't it?

And Mark...thanks for the kudo's.

jwesley
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James, this is awesome...I love the image of the sand grasping at her footprint...
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10 posted 01-12-2001 12:34 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

JWesley~ this is exactly what I hope my husband will do for me, should I pass before him........beautifully done   -SEA
jwesley
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11 posted 01-12-2001 02:03 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Sunshine - Thanks much.

Sea - wonder why I'm not surprised??

jwesley
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geez, I need to get to the beach now!
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