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One More Lie
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One More Lie |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Whisper one more lie before you walk out the door leave me here wondering if you’ll come back for more. I hid my knowledge from you perhaps I hope you’ll see that I will always love you no matter what you do to me. I know I am to be pitied my friends all tell me this but they can never understand how I melt at just your kiss. I’ll wait up for you tonight and hope there will not be those telltale signs that you have lied again to me. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
reminds me of someone I used to be.......powerful read......  -SEA |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening poet deVine, Very powerful words that you speak tonight. Wish you the best. BC |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
all it takes is once. . . powerful words from you my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
what's the saying? screw me once, it's fine and i might like it... no!!!!... that's not it... what IS the saying??? fool me twice, and i'm a fool... no!!! that's not it! geesh... anyway, the third time is a "shame on me" thing, i remember THAT! ... (maybe that's the problem, i don't remember the saying! LOL...  ).... anyway, what i'm trying to say is... GREAT WRITING, SHARON!!!  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I hope it helps to write at times like this, for sometimes it is all we have. Bless you. "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Staying in the dark keeps the sun from hurting your eyes, but keeps the heart from feeling its warmth......btdt Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And the hours of waiting are endless... until the wait is over and the lie is confirmed and you wish you could go back to the time of not knowing. *S* Well done! |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
The hurt goes so deep when faithful love is not returned, yet there's peace in the clear conscience. Wonderful writing that reaches the depths of tender hearts. Thanks. Rae |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
The hurt goes so deep when faithful love is not returned, yet there's peace in the clear conscience. Wonderful writing that reaches the depths of tender hearts. Thanks. Rae |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I'll wish a star to the sky tonight it won't appear till late You'll have to squint and look real hard it could take any shape In case you miss it don't despair it only weighs an ounce It may not reach a human eye but it's the thought that counts I stood at those crossroads myself, many years ago and felt that same way wishing you all the best |
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Beckalini Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 151Yorkshire, England |
A wonderfully heart-felt and real poem, from someone who appears to be a very feeling and real person. Keep that chin up honey! Hugs to you, ~Becky~ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I was fully prepared to write a serious bit of "fatherly" --- but after reading Doreen's reply - - well- you understand - you may not believe this - but we males allow ourselves to believe lies too - I guess it comes down to what we want to believe - especially when we fall. A masterful bit of writing Sharon - Seriously |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
PdV, People who this sort of thing are mean and cruel. Someone should to it to them so they know how it feels to get their hopes up only to have them come crashing down around you. Nice writing. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
*deep sighs* I relate all too well to this, it's funny how a woman will have her mind made up until he melts her with his kiss - I'm sure almost every woman has had this experience. Very well expressed, Sharon! Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all....every wonder why some women 'hang on' even when they've been lied to? |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
PDV~ very powerful write! loved this one girlie really did. i hope only the best for you and that you find some peace & happiness in this situation. i could impart some advice to you but i won't as i dont know the full situation. so i'll just simply say wonderful piece. take care amy ~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
~HUG~ hon I've been there many years ago and it was hell, one day I just couldn't do it anymore so I said "enough is enough, I'm outta here" and my life turned out beautifully...I hope hon your does too. floating winged ~HUGS~ your way and loads of strength Love Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I could feel your poem so intensely, I know how your feeling, If they lie once, they will do it again, and again, hurting you over and over, mental abuse! How can you truely love someone like that! someone you can't trust? You can't love them, for without trust, you can't build a relationship out of love! Great poem!!! Hugs to you !!!if you need a friend, E-mail me! [This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (edited 01-13-2001).] |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
This is too close to home...*sigh* Nice write Poet Devine... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Ms.deVine...boy do I ever know this feeling...hugs to you sweet friend...and he just doesnt deserve you at all |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I think that we often stay here until we find out the unknown is less painful than where we are at....this brings so many things to mind, fantastic writing PDV! You can swim in the waves of the weave...without sinking into the mind of the weaver~ |
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