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Candlelight Bay

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Victoria
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0 posted 01-11-2001 01:11 AM       View Profile for Victoria   Email Victoria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Victoria

Come stroll the sandy dunes of Candlelight Bay
I plead do not let time take you away
do not let my memory in your mind ever stray
remember upon our lips the taste of Cabernet
shared within our love of Candlelight Bay

let us leave forever footprints upon the shore
grains of sand in the wind forever we will soar
only time will take you away my paramour

forever in the night our bodies will sway
upon the shores dancing in Candlelight Bay
forever we will drift in the wind like bouquet
our sweet memories will never melt like sorbet
and if the hand of time invites me to dance away
I will return as a mermaid in Candlelight Bay



A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)  






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1 posted 01-11-2001 01:14 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Victoria~   This is gorgeous!! I loved the ending........ -SEA
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Victoria~
Lovely, sensual piece...well penned
Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe


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3 posted 01-11-2001 08:37 AM       View Profile for dragonpoe   Email dragonpoe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dragonpoe


Very nice.


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4 posted 01-11-2001 11:05 AM       View Profile for Victoria   Email Victoria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Victoria

thank you Sea tracie and Dragonpoe for reading...love the mermaid tracie...HUGS TO ALL...

               ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
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5 posted 01-11-2001 11:06 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Victoria, this title drew me in...to a pure delight of read...thank you for weaving this one...
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6 posted 01-11-2001 11:19 AM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

like this much
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a mermaid in Candlelight Bay better watch out for those fishermen. Beautiful images on that sandy shore.
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8 posted 01-11-2001 11:49 AM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee

I absolutely love the way you weave your words in this fantasy-like romantic piece!  One of your best, I'm printing out a copy for myself   The flow and the rhyme is perfect and I love how you repeat the line "of/in Candlelight Bay" throughout, that's very effective, especially when you begin and the end the poem with that important line

Take care,
Melissa

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9 posted 01-11-2001 02:37 PM       View Profile for Victoria   Email Victoria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Victoria

sunshine..thanks you..i enjoyed writing this one very much..and im so glad you enjoyed too

vandana..thank you for peeking


inot2b..i would love to be a mermaid and tease all the fisherman haa...thank you

melissa..thank you melissa..for all your very kind compliments..

                  ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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10 posted 01-11-2001 02:59 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

oh, thank you for taking me away for a few moments, the sorbet was wonderful!

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart

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Thank you kathleen..ha..i am so glad you enjoyed ...HUGS  

               ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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To leave ones forever behind...
to imprint upon anothers heart
such wonderful lasting thoughts, Lady ~V~

~smiling forever thoughts~
Lady Ollyne



"O, learn to read what silent love hath writ:
To hear with eyes belongs to love's fine wit"...Shakespeare
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forever in the night our bodies will sway
upon the shores dancing in Candlelight Bay
forever we will drift in the wind like bouquet
our sweet memories will never melt like sorbet
and if the hand of time invites me to dance away
I will return as a mermaid in Candlelight Bay
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Victoria,
This is stunning. Love the visual blended with tender love.
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thank you very much Lady and Deb..
i had fun writing this one..and im
happy you both enjoyed it...HUGS

              ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)


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all these folks writing about water and beaches...and it's January...I still may have to go
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16 posted 11-25-2003 01:42 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Victoria~
Though you are no longer here, or haven't been for some time ... I hope that someday you will return to see that your beautiful poetry is still being enjoyed~

I miss ya' lady~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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