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serene in scream |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Here then, now I call my friend... a simple vein, salute, again... a tourniquette held once a bout, the prayer to feel the silent shout... to slap her once again solute the painlessness of absolute and all again the peace of womb the ease of silence of the tomb tell me I'll not feel again this whore that is my silent friend... and everything I was before for just this night shall not be more... a long upon a thick steal door... and tell me, promise, I'll have more... There is nothing left of me. cotton, spoon's serenity... a flame of obverse alchemy... obscuring all that's left to see, and just a beggar's plea for more... and every bargain of soul's more I wish that you could set me free-- an angel left in charge of me... I pray that you could set me free and break these bonds of blood of peace... Tell me...there is hope for me... whisper sweet sweet lies ... tell me life is my release? with all my hunger to believe I have no wish to die... And all my pain is silent scream echoes of serene in dream... and every heartbeat felt before.... makes me wish for one taste more. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow..........this is powerful and stunning.....excellent write........-SEA |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
and yet again you write my heart like a mirror..... |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
"And all my pain is silent scream echoes of serene in dream... and every heartbeat felt before.... makes me wish for one taste more." Beautiful |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Serenity, Ah, "for one taste more . . ." like fine chocolate to the 'prisoner of one'. The tease, the tease of life . . . sometimes I know that's just all there is . . . /:^|== =#== |
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Author Unknown Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 57Linn MO USA |
Serenity...wow girl...this is so powerful and compelling |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
I wish that you could set me free-- an angel left in charge of me... I pray that you could set me free and break these bonds of blood of peace... Tell me...there is hope for me... whisper sweet sweet lies ... tell me life is my release? with all my hunger to believe I have no wish to die... And all my pain is silent scream echoes of serene in dream... and every heartbeat felt before.... makes me wish for one taste more. ---------------------- astounding...simply astounding write..... i love it all over..i'm wow'd speechless.... hugs, g "oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..." cat stevens |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Screams emergent renderer effulgence notion illuminating trust yearneth Excellent writing... Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 01-11-2001).] |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is one of your most powerful pieces.. you get better and better all the time. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
S'en...all I can say is I love you my friend...Hugs~ Swim in the waves of the weave...Not the mind of the weaver~ |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
And all my pain is silent scream echoes of serene in dream... and every heartbeat felt before.... makes me wish for one taste more. I hear you calling out, and you word it so well. But now it's time to gather different tastes. Away from pain and heartache. Somewhere happiness is calling. Via con Dios, Stan |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
And all my pain is silent scream echoes of serene in dream... and every heartbeat felt before.... makes me wish for one taste more. I hear you calling out, and you word it so well. But now it's time to gather different tastes. Away from pain and heartache. Somewhere happiness is calling you. Via con Dios, Stan |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Beautiful yearning I wish that you could set me free-- an angel left in charge of me... I pray that you could set me free and break these bonds of blood of peace... god this is just soo incredible...thanks for sharing ~HUGS~ always Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I can't say how much i like this one. I love the feeling after reading it. And i am going to read again... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Intense..... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I wanted to say thank you--and twice to Stan--for your kindness and generosity in your replies...and please know? That I am well. HUGS to all for being so wonderfully caring. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wow. . . can I just say that??? --------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
powerful words...... ((hugs)) Charisma |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
My goodness Serenity, you are soooooo gifted in writing ya know and your poem is absolutely stunning sweetie it leaves me with the urge to say in reply 'wow' just like our PoetFriend Sven has said : Hugs2u ~coco~ |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
I see the bubbling the want to swoon in absolute adherance to nothing but still the screams like bubbles rise to surface eventually exploding in atmosphere they are Heard "When all hope has left, and you can no longer find a reason to breathe, you will find yourself already dead, murdered by your own dream." |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
Pain felt cancels not pain given. I felt the strength in your poem was the need to experiance. "makes me wish for one taste more."  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh the workings of the mind as it reflects....the silent scream exists in all of us..and I too wish for one taste more...however, I've never looked at you from the aspect of being "a flame of obverse alchemy" good line..... fits so well with the rest. Wonderful write Celeste! That angel is about to awaken you again and there'll be a wealth of words there for you to describe the moment and I'll be looking forward to reading them......take care ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is one of your most powerful pieces...... Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wow...you wrote every word of this on my heart.....great stuff girl.....really deep...I know, *nods her head*...I know... |
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POETIC THUG Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 42HOUSTON TEXAS BABY |
Very touching,one of the best that you have writen. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sven, a wow from you is like a million words. Thank you. Charisma, Hugs back to you with gratitude. Coco...laughing...you should be a detective! once again, you startle me. Thank you so much for all of your gracious attention! AT...this was one I was hoping very few could relate to--oh, and anybody ever tell ya you are a nice guy?  lol and thanksthecraig...hi! and yes, much of it IS based on pure boredom--thank you and a belated welcome to passions! ethome...I do so appreciate all of your support and encouragement...you are a wonder! Kathleen...I thank you much, with HUGS. jb? We're gonna have to have some kind of club membership card soon!  (thank you) PT--thank you, I know that you like the "power" poems too... Once again I'd like to thank you all, your responses are overwhelming. A curtsey to the forum. |
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