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Thoughts of You (hopping from 11) |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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Just when i think all is gone < !signature-->a whisper of you comes along a thought, sweet and gentle a smile adorns my face i guess my heart loves you the thought of your embrace Just when i think all is gone you enter my mind like a song maybe just sentimental my heart starts to race remembering your hue my love for you can not erase Just when i think all is gone just like egg foo youg though intercontinental a blush upon my face over an ocean of blue my memory doth trace Just when i think all is gone a teardrop slips away like a sarong though the feeling is mental we entwined, a shoe lace in love me and you our memories still interlace Just when i think all is gone a bell within sings ding dong just instrumental thoughts of you doth grace a pas de deux memories arranged in a crystal vase Just when i think all is gone you come along..along again A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 01-10-2001).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wow! Victoria, I loved this, i loved the rhyming scheme, I loved the phrasing, I loved the idea behind it. Well Done! Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Me too, Vic. Great poem! Sandra |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you kethry and sandra..i enjoyed writing..yes a different rhyme form for a change kethry..nice to hear from both of you HUGS..  ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I loved the idea, the thoughts, the ryming scheme and the repetition. Strong emotions, yet soft at the same time. Right up my alley. *S* |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you very much..nice to hear from you today appreciate all your nice comments~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Victoria, Oh wow, wow, wow, you did it this time. A beauty you have written, that has raised BC's eyebrow's. I like very much Victoria. BC |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Lovely write...soft and sweet. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
This is quite well done ... well worth reading again |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
bill..thank you very much..pleased you enjoyed bill..nice to hear from you today.. poeminister..thank you ...for taking time to read..happy you enjoyed Rex..thank you and for peeking in ... ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 Quite a mix of words and culture from food to ballet made for a very entertaining read... and you stayed with an amazing rhyme scheme as well. Good versatility, Bob <>< |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Nice to hear from you bob.. im happy you enjoyed reading Thank you for visiting. ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Where are you Victoria? James |
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