»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #12
»
Midnight Butterfly Tanka
| Open Poetry #12 |
|
Midnight Butterfly Tanka |
|
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
|
~MIDNIGHT BUTTERFLY TANKA~ 5-7-5-7-7 ~Midnight hour engulfs beauties with sky's ebony butterflies still dream the spirit may be broken yet it's wings can still soar free~ *By Melissa Honeybee* |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Melissa, lovely thoughts, lovely Tanka Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
||
|
VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very pretty. It's a little hard for me to imagine butterflies flying at night, kinda spooky really. Would they head for the light as moths do? To the best of my knowledge, though, you did the tanka perfectly! |
||
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
indeed they can my friend. . . wonderful. . .  ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
||
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Kethry and Sven - I'm so glad that you enjoyed my message. Thank you Vas - Thank you for reading this. Actually I meant for the first half of the tanka to be spooky and sullen with the midnight theme, hence the first 2 lines "midnight hour engulfs beauties with sky's ebony. Yes, it is hard to imagine such beautiful winged beauties flying through the night and that is why I chose to use them as a metaphor to show that even through pain there is still hope, and butterflies, like people can still dream trying to find that light even in darkness. Spirits can not easily be broken. I'm glad that you mentioned that point. Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
||
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
  Melissa Metaphorical Magic 'butterflies still dream' Perhaps they dream of flying at midnight Magnificient ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
||
|
Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Lovely tanka. Enjoyed the imagery in your words. Capitally done. Poeminister |
||
SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Beautiful message of hope here.......enjoyed this -SEA |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Melissa! Long time no see! This is wonderful...welcome home! |
||
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Marge - Thank you for the beautifully arranged graphics and for the compliment Poeminister - Thank you, I'm glad that you enjoyed the imagery, butterflies are so breathtaking to me, imagery just flows easily from their vision in my mind, thanks for reading Sea - I'm glad that you were inspired with hope by my message Sunshine - Happy to be back! Thanks for the welcome and I'm equally happy that you enjoyed this senryu The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
||
|
Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You used the perfect subject to express your thoughts in this. Wonderfully done and beautifully descriptive. |
||
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Mark - I'm so glad that you read this, thank you! Yes, butterflies always seem to be a perfect subject to write about, they are so beautiful, yet mysterious Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
||
|
Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
love this wonderful tanka....lovely imagery. ((hugs)) Charisma |
||
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you Charisma, glad you liked it The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
||
|
Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
A very nice idea for a poem! Lovely! |
||
|
Beckalini Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 151Yorkshire, England |
Truly beautiful Melissa. Well done ~Becky~ |
||
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you Elizabeth and Becky, glad you liked the thought The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
||
|
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
heres another one who liked this tanka..you seem to be maturing in your writing...good for you!! |
||
|
tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW!!! Melissa what a beautifull Tanka, wonderful effort ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
||
|
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Beautiful!! Maree I need a lullaby a kiss goodnight Angel sweet love of my life Oh, I need this ~Natalie Merchant~ |
||
|
Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is so lovely, the thoughts and the poem Liz |
||
|
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Kaile, Tracie66, Dark Angel, Liz...Thank you all so much for your wonderful replies. Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
||
|
Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
This is so special...... what more can I possibly say?  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
