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I Wanna Be First ( the poem's called Letting Go)
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I Wanna Be First ( the poem's called Letting Go) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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Okay...a repost just because I wanted to be the first post in #12...Hey, I deserve to start off one of them  I let you go, bit by bit, as you slip through my fingers falling in words on my paper. My heart still echoes your beat as it once more tries to find a rhythm of it’s own. My body, embedded with memories of your touch, remains fingerprinted with the ink of your desire. My lips still taste your kisses as you breathed life into my soul. My eyes close only to see every smile, every move and they let you spill forth in mirrors of liquid upon my cheeks as my mind curses the photographic images emblazoned there. Yes, I’ll let you go, bit by bit ....but perhaps not tonight. < !signature--> What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compaired to what lies within us. [url] [URL=http://www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 01-09-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I want the first reply! Bravo!! "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I can't be first - to post or reply - But I can proudly tell you I love this post - and will put it in my treasure box |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
an enjoyable read..esp enjoyed the line "fingerprinted with the ink of your desire"...wonderful image |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, Glad you reposted, never read this and it's certainly worth reading. Excellent Sy |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Hoot_Owl_m, This is definitely a first, first in style first in class, first to show the hour glass. Loved it! Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Agust P Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 157 |
I liked this poem, very good, thanks, AP |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Great images and thoughts, I'm sure we all can relate. Once again, this is a superior poem and you express it with that flair all your own. I relate very much to the last verse Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Hold today, the memories of tomorrow. Love this poem! Deb |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And indeed, sweet Ruth...you shall always be first! Well done, glad to see you posting, yours are always favored ones to read! {I was first once...what a thrill!] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes you do. . . and what a way to begin!!! great one Ruth! ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
My heart still echoes your beat as it once more tries to find a rhythm of it’s own. I love this stanza...it is so true... beautiful write...*sigh* I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks everyone for your kind replies....this happens to rank amoung the favorites of all my poems although not written at one of the high points in my life. (And sunshine....yeah, it's great to come in first for once ) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth--It is wonderful to read your poetry, first, middle or last...loved this one! |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
With top quality writing like this, I don't think anyone minds if you go first all the time Ruth |
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DonFurr Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 172Monticello IN |
Delightful and stirring. A warm and wonderful thought. I will be watching closely for your work |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Hey Ruth you can go first anytime with a piece like this...well done, just beautiful and that ending superb ~HUGS~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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startin_fresh Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 137US |
Very touching and true! We let go bit by bit. Sometimes it's truly hard to let someone go you've loved so dearly. Your poem expresses how it truly felt when I have had to let go. < !signature--> "You can't reason with your heart; it has it's own laws and thumps about things which the intellect scorns." ~ Mark Twain [This message has been edited by startin_fresh (edited 01-10-2001).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Not tonight, eh???.... I do love it - This is superb... and I'm glad you got here first ..  Happy days, my friend.. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
HootieGal~ Some great thoughts clustered in this piece. Enjoyed the trickling of the memories. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Once more...thanks to everyone for the nice comments and always for your continued support of my poety. Passions, my friends, and my family have given me back my voice and it's great to sing out once more What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compaired to what lies within us. [url] [URL=http://www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
HOOT, it's my favorite of your's as it stands today and I'm elated to get this chance to thread into my library... Thank you for sharing this splendid write coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 01-10-2001).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you Coco |
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