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Jamie
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Blue Heaven

0 posted 2001-01-08 01:23 AM


The Last Fairy Tale


This is a tale most poets disdain,
So full of words they often feign.
     Within each lie offered up to sell,
     Is a small truth we never tell.
In our dim dreams it will always dwell.

With misplaced muse and thoughts we toil,
Waiting for some inner  greatness to uncoil.
     Till our fairy tales rise on molted wing,
     Giving words and song for angels to sing,
Spouting from our pens the  fraud will fling.

Build a stout cabin of truth  for my soul,
No empty mansion will make me whole,
     Trumpet your dreams from childhoods horn  
     Let it ring in my ears all the hopes its born,
While we discuss ancient times we mourn.

No longer written are grand stories that last,
The poets who wrote them are all in our past.
     One day perhaps we'll see rise a full sail,
     And a wandering child of the sea will regale,
Some amazing  adventure about a fantasy whale.





Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2001-01-08 01:54 AM


This is a tale most poets disdain,
So full of words they often feign.
     Within each lie offered up to sell,
     Is a small truth we never tell.
In our dim dreams it will always dwell.
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theres a whole lot of truth in that jamie..
very cool poem...
perfect cadence...was excellent to read a loud
very well written, with a unique twist of poetic view
creative and well done
take care
jm

No one ever told me ... I could get lost while standing still ...
and sorrow doesnt make a sound ... as it takes away all your will.


Mark Bohannan
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2 posted 2001-01-08 02:04 AM


This is all too true and all too sad.  I have mountains of books filled with poetry from Kahlil Gibran and Robert Frost and Elizabeth Browning to just name a few but I also have alot of the classic novels as well and I find it rare that any novel that comes out now comes close to the character and freshness of any of the antiquated writes.  Wonderful subject to pen and beautifully done so.  I too read it aloud and it flows masterfully.
Paula Finn
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missouri
3 posted 2001-01-08 02:59 AM


Oh Jamie...its so wonderful to find you here again...and while I do not compare anyone to Shakespeare or Hemingway...what we write you and I...is just as real just as valid...and in your case...just as beautiful as Romeo and Juliet...hugs sweet friend

Life's a game...but who says you have to follow the rules?



Kethry
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4 posted 2001-01-08 03:22 AM


Well whales need stories to exist as do all fantasy creatures! Ring a bell if you believe in Whales before they are gone from memory.

Prometheus, I so loved this... tales of high adventure written with style and italics.
Write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.


CocoBaci
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5 posted 2001-01-08 03:37 AM



A great write PROM...
I very much enjoy reading your poetry and I thank you for a superb read
~*Coco*~

Dark Angel
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6 posted 2001-01-08 05:05 AM


This is so true Jamie and so cleverly written!
Thanks for a wonderful read  

Maree

I need a lullaby
a kiss goodnight
Angel sweet love of my life
Oh, I need this

~Natalie Merchant~

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
7 posted 2001-01-08 06:00 AM


My, this is good!! I think you should submit this to the main site!!    
Sunshine
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8 posted 2001-01-08 11:38 AM


Jamie, does not mean you are NOT going to attempt the next Odyssey?  Won't you reconsider, PLEASE?
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 2001-01-08 11:50 AM


Much food for thought in what you write, and surely the inspiration for a great ballad of a whale. THank you for these wonderfully expressed truths. It might be well to ponder just what were missing in those classic piece of literature.
Liz

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10 posted 2001-01-08 12:44 PM


you are so right...and I enjoyed reading your words..nicely done

                ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



Sunnyone
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11 posted 2001-01-08 01:07 PM


Jamie,
I love fairy tales, and hope they live on forever, and I think they might as long as humans have a need to believe in 'happily ever after'!! Great write!!  
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Write on!
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Jamie
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12 posted 2001-01-08 07:02 PM


Thanks for the overwhelming "right on"..lol  perhaps writers will follow the lead of the fashion industry and look to the past...if not there are a few here who could take the lead....again, thanks very much.


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


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