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Master
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0 posted 2001-01-06 09:13 PM


The fleeting time reflected in my eyes...
I broke the hourglass and as I gathered
the falling grains, I came to realize,--
time isn’t slipping from our grasp, but rather,
it’s building castles out of sand, along the sea,
where you and I can dwell eternally.


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Master
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1 posted 2001-01-06 11:56 PM


any suggestions?
dragonpoe
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2 posted 2001-01-07 12:12 PM


A delightful little peice of wisdom, gently said with a craft. I like it.

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Master
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3 posted 2001-01-07 09:44 AM


Thanks Dragonpoe, glad you liked it!

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Sven
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4 posted 2001-01-07 02:04 PM


I like this one Master. . . it's excellent. . . I like too, the image of the hourglass and breaking it. . . we've all felt like doing that. . .

The idea that time doesn't slip through our fingers is my favorite though. . . time is what we make of it. . . and in choosing to make sandcastles, we make lives and memories that will live always. . .

I love it. . .it's perfect, don't change anything!!!

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Master
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5 posted 2001-01-07 03:35 PM


Thank you Sven,

I'm glad you liked it!

passing shadows
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6 posted 2004-04-19 04:22 AM


this is good...very good
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