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Shadows Of Goodbye

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Jamie
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0 posted 01-05-2001 10:11 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

Shadows of Goodbye

I live in the shadows that cover me
So pale is the mirror I want to flee
I see in the dark but all is gray
My colors are buried and now decay
The memories fade but I still recall
A brightness about them that could enthrall
The nights they are long when you cannot pray
These cold shadows grow longer day by day
A longing inside me grows even more
A desire for life that I can't ignore
Heavy chains now lie broken at my feet
I step from the shadows that now retreat
I look to the sky and see castles there
Whoever thought I would live in the air?





Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

© Copyright 2001 Jamie Patterson - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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1 posted 01-05-2001 10:36 PM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

Jamie,
this sounds like goodbye! I hope so much it isn't. I've enjoyed your work so much. In fact you were one of the first poets I read and I was so impressed I wanted to be like you. (that was before I discovered the difference in the sexes)

If it is goodbye I wish you well and know that you will remain in my heart forever.

be well
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.


Jamie
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2 posted 01-05-2001 10:53 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

There are indeed goodbyes there, but please don't think they are meant for Passions.  


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

Alwye
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In the space between moments


3 posted 01-05-2001 10:56 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

"I look to the sky and see castles there Whoever thought I would live in the air?" --a perfect ending to a sorrowful and deep piece of work.  I loved it, especially the last two lines.  Wonderful!  

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant
jwesley
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4 posted 01-05-2001 11:05 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Great Write!!  Enjoyed this much!!  Loved the last two lines in particular.


jwesley
Kethry
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5 posted 01-05-2001 11:13 PM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

Phew,
now I can relax again!
When are you going to do another stunningly romantic piece that you do so well. I've been practising the language  
Keth


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.


Poet deVine
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6 posted 01-05-2001 11:34 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Sounds like you are moving on....it's wonderful news...leave those chains there and step on out into the world...welcome!  
Paula Finn
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7 posted 01-06-2001 01:51 AM       View Profile for Paula Finn   Email Paula Finn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paula Finn

Jamie...I have missed you friend...and some goodbyes just have to be...doesnt make them easy...but you know I am always here for you...hugs...this is sad and glorious all at once...fly sweetie FLY
brian madden
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8 posted 01-06-2001 09:53 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

The memories fade but I still recall
A brightness about them that could enthrall
The nights they are long when you cannot pray
These cold shadows grow longer day by day

a deep and sad piece, wonderfully written.

"I look to the sky and see castles there
Whoever thought I would live in the air?"

loved the last two lines.



There's a feeling of contentment Now that you are here I feel satisfied I belong
inside Your velvet heaven" Depeche mode
Jamie
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9 posted 01-06-2001 08:45 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

Thanks for the most kind replies, perhaps one day the ending may come true (for all of us)...again thanks very much.


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

Dark Angel
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10 posted 01-06-2001 10:12 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Hey Jamie a very deep piece my friend.

The memories fade but I still recall
A brightness about them that could enthrall
The nights they are long when you cannot pray
these cold shadows grow longer day by day

indeed they can
but all ya got to do is, step over those chains.

and I loved the ending lines my dear.

Maree  

I need a lullaby
a kiss goodnight
Angel sweet love of my life
Oh, I need this

~Natalie Merchant~
Severn
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11 posted 01-07-2001 01:21 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

A profound goodbye my friend...

This is a haunting piece - and this line really moved me:

'The nights they are long when you cannot pray'

Oh yes, I believe you are right.

Hugs J - and a great write too

K


nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines


12 posted 01-07-2001 02:14 AM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

I look to the sky and see castles there
Whoever thought I would live in the air?

Jamie-  those last two lines are so beautiful...I can  look to the clouds sometimes...and see those castles...

~Wynter



"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


13 posted 01-07-2001 07:33 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

This engulfs my mood exactly, so I thank you for making me feel not so very much alone...
Jamie
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14 posted 01-07-2001 07:28 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

Maree-- Well dear,, I'm a pretty deep person...lol....thank you for caring.

Kamla-- A great write huh?-- Makes me feel so good coming from such a taskmaster...hehe---- thanks kind lady..

Wynter--- As long as you can see them they are always within reach aren't they?...Thanks for the nice reply.

Sunshine-- Thank You,, and you are welcome,-- As long as there are folks like you and the others here, we are never really alone.


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

Sunnyone
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15 posted 01-07-2001 08:30 PM       View Profile for Sunnyone   Email Sunnyone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunnyone's Home Page   View IP for Sunnyone

Jamie.....
Reaching for the castles in the air and letting go of the chains sounds like a wonderful expression of freedom to me!  Sometimes goodbyes are necessary for personal growth, and I applaud you, and this poem!!  


Write on!
-<--<--{(@

passing shadows
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very uplifting (pardon the pun)
 
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