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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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On a morning after graveyard duty from a prison where she lost her time she's calling through the pain to weave her story about mistaken minds. She comes out of the heart where the tears start flowing like a river spilling from the veins She lost her lasting expectations and she lost at the game in the future she passed. By the graffiti walls where the night trade calls she passed the sad moment of truth now she tries her best to give new direction to the spoils of youth. Through the jaded halls where the shadows fall there's a third floor room she turned to where the night light flames were flickered remains of a fire passing through in the future she passed. Her tears fall on a sponge filled desert Her words cry like the wind in the trees She calls to mind her first vision a small home by the sea. In the future she passed. Well the time has come and it's bitter all the guests and the score lists are gone and she's thrown away her time and her mission and she's got to move on. But the warning's the same the bell tolls again and the message sounds another day and she's not sure who's gonna listen but she's gonna have her say in the future she passed the future she passed..... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ What a hauntingly lovely write. 'But the warning's the same the bell tolls again and the message sounds another day and she's not sure who's gonna listen but she's gonna have her say' Oh ... I enjoyed this and really want to know the inspiration for it. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
Tis' sad.. the search that leads to dead ends and lost hopes and dreams.. One can only pray for light on the path to find the way. The past and future are all complete futility if the present is not spent in love and harmony with a heart of thanksgiving. I enjoyed this thought evoking piece..thanks Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I took this one to my heart and MADE it mine.....even if it was not your intention..(I'm sorta insistant that way...grin) ya made me smile and cry all at once.... she's me, I tell ya...sigh... merci. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What can I say...the pictures you present, the titles you place on your poems...all perfect...all...Ethome! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
By the graffiti walls where the night trade calls she passed the sad moment of truth now she tries her best to give new direction to the spoils of youth. Through the jaded halls where the shadows fall there's a third floor room she turned to where the night light flames were flickered remains of a fire passing through in the future she passed. Her tears fall on a sponge filled desert Her words cry like the wind in the trees She calls to mind her first vision a small home by the sea. In the future she passed. ==================== But the warning's the same the bell tolls again and the message sounds another day and she's not sure who's gonna listen but she's gonna have her say ==================== haunting, melodic, melancholy piece E-babes very cool...very unique perspective and I like Marge would find your inspiration for this fascinating ... if ya wish to tell  later-made me curious-gator jm Am I loved by my words Will my vows weather the tide Bended knees can forsee all the rhythms of life And a heart can be held without pride ~Vante |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--what ability you have to look at a life and write it like it was your own...very interesting, emotive, thought provoking poem...and a song of course, always a song. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"and she's not sure who's gonna listen but she's gonna have her say" ethome-The time lost is a calamity...but hopefully the truth will surface and justice eventually prevail. A wonderful, and touching piece. Poeminister |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
ethome...this is down to earth, realistic writing....extremely well done. Nelson Algren could have written this...and that's a compliment...excuse me while I go read it again..... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Haunting, sad, and very well done. Enjoyed the read, both times. jwesley |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You truly know how to sing the blues sweet poet man...the images are just so VIVID...and haunting |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Marge I appreciate the haunting word and your kind words...thanks for reading! Koko thank you for your analysis of this I appreciate the thoughts ethome No Celeste this is not you so I have to say so but I'm so glad you stopped in to read and could relate to it...ethome Thanks Sunshine for assessing my work that way...much appreciated...ethome Thank you my dear poet pet Janet. I always love your replies they are so uplifing and so fulfilling for the author....glad you liked those verses.....take care...ethome Martie I'm so pleased that you always recognize the song value in my poems ...so good to hear fom you... ethome Poeminister you're right it's a shame to see time wasted for so long...thanks for the input I appreciate it! Thank you Balladeer I will take that as a compliment even though I'm not familiar with Nelson's work...thanks again! James glad you could stop in and have a read...thank so much...ethome |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Paula I'm sorry I miised you on the list of thank yous so here it is thank you very much for your comments...ethome |
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