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Quiet One Junior Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 46Shhhhh |
Living Hell ''''''''''' Hearts in memory drawn before us haste display their vesting style Daydreams cast and plead restore us dancing o'er a rusted smile ''''' Chancing fancies may discover heart-light cast where sins may dwell Shadow darkened skies recover the isolation sought to quell ''''' Sifting through those haunting traces ringing round a fading light Who might stop and trade us faces invest a smile to warm the night ''''' To the wise that rise above us bend an ear to wishing well See the dancers push and shove us to the brink of . . . ''''' ''''' ''''' |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
well, well, well...what do we have here? IT'S ABOUT TIME. I've been watching you lurk all night...and still waters DO run deep... AND WELCOME!!!! This is superb...excellently crafted, the flow is there, the thoughts are as well, (and I DO so relate) and the ending is so clever I am positively green with envy! ME LIKES VERY MUCH. (could ya tell?) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Quiet1, I so much enjoyed reading your poem you share this eve... I hope to read more from you on the nights ahead... A splendid write Coco |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Welcome to Passions, Quiet One, I can't believe that this awesome work was overlooked! definitely a good read! -Tier{Robin} |
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Quiet One Junior Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 46Shhhhh |
serenity You're very kind, thankyou I have read several of your poems and to be honest, they sort of set the mood as I wrote this one You are very good ''''''''''''''''' Thankyou Coco I don't write very often I'm more of a reader, a shadow that feels ''''''''''''''''' Thankyou Robin I don't really think it's been overlooked,the title will probably keep most people away After all, who wants to read what is probably a depressing poem ''''''''''''''''' |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Quiet one, Welcome to passions! I only have one thing to say if this is a sample of your work... WRITE ON IN SONGKethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Quiet One...welcome to Passions! You will be surprised at what good titles will do...and you shall have many readers in the days to come, trust me! Welcome, and check your e-mail for a special greeting! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Wow... this is really good. Hope to read more of your work. Welcome to Passions! Deb |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent Quiet One. . . this does flow wonderfully. . .and I like the way that you laid it out. . . Welcome my friend to Passions. . . where I hope that you will indeed not be a "Quiet One". . .  --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Welcome, Quiet One, to Passions. I, also am new and like to check out all the different styles. Yours is very nice and moving. Keep writing, hugs, ME |
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Quiet One Junior Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 46Shhhhh |
Thankyou Kethry That's a very nice compliment '''''''''''' Sunshine thankyou for the lovely card and your kind words of welcome '''''''''''' BloomingRose Thankyou for reading, I'm glad you liked it '''''''''''' Thankyou for the king welcome Sven I'll try to fit in as best I can '''''''''''' Thankyou Mother_Earth I've been reading quite a bit here and I'm very impressed with the people and the poetry '''''''''''' |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Hearts in memory drawn before us haste display their vesting style Daydreams cast and plead restore us dancing o'er a rusted smile Sorry I missed this first time round, belated welcome to passions, really enjoyed the read and look forward to more from your pen. There's a feeling of contentment Now that you are here I feel satisfied I belong inside Your velvet heaven" Depeche mode |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
Aloha and welcome. I have not been here that long myself. i am very impressed with your poem, it's flow and rhythm are wonderful....a great read! Ilook forward to seeing more of your art! Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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Quiet One Junior Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 46Shhhhh |
Thakyou Brian I'm glad you liked it and thankyou for the kind welcome ''''''''' Thankyou Koko thats a very nice compliment ''''''''' |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
that is a hell of a first post. i am truly amazed. it's going right in the old library. exquisite work. please keep it up! oh and welcome. enjoy your stay. i'll send Ted the Bellhop to retrieve those bags. "...a gross, physical salute to the fantastic possiblilties of life...-but only for those with true grit. We're chock full of that." *snoogins* |
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Quiet One Junior Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 46Shhhhh |
Thankyou Ethan Do Bell-hops take Master Card? |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Very nice ... welcome to Passions Quiet One |
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ranita311 Junior Member
since 2001-01-04
Posts 10 |
very good poem !! hope to read more from you. welcome to passions  )ranita311 |
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