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maxtec1
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0 posted 2001-01-04 11:22 PM



I Am
By Richard Maxfield
8-7-2000

I am a world
In a world
Spinning off in space
I am a man
In a man
Hidden behind a face

I am a heart
In a heart
Do I not cry
I am a soul
In a soul
Asking the question why

I am love
In side of love
Yet I set alone
I am pain
In pain
Yet I’m not gone

I am a dream
Inside a dream
But wake to reality
I am an eye
Inside an eye
Looking for the real me

© Copyright 2001 Richard Maxfield - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2001-01-04 11:53 PM


do we ever find the real me?  I wonder...

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Lady Lightning
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2 posted 2001-01-05 02:15 AM


wanted to copy the whole thing here but I kept me restrained....LOL..Richard, another truly lovely peice you have here...Loved it, much... Hugs... ~LL~< !signature-->

The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost.  author unknown

[This message has been edited by Lady Lightning (edited 01-06-2001).]

CocoBaci
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3 posted 2001-01-05 02:20 AM


Max, I like the format you wrote this in...
There's many a time I can relate to some of the feelings you have penned here...
Thank you for sharing this with us...
I appreciated reading your challenge response


Charisma
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lost in blue pages
4 posted 2001-01-05 04:40 AM


love it...love the form you give it...and the man you are.
wonderful done

Charisma

Kethry
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5 posted 2001-01-05 08:24 AM


Maxtec 1,
a creative and lovely piece.
write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



BloomingRose
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6 posted 2001-01-05 09:01 AM


So much inside...
Many can relate to this.
Good write.
Deb

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7 posted 2001-01-05 09:15 PM


yup, originality is the word..love the way you have chosen to express yourself
Victoria
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8 posted 2001-01-05 09:23 PM


i wonder if we ever find out who we really are..what is deep inside..it would probably take more than a lifetime..good one rich

                 ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



Lighthousebob
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9 posted 2001-01-05 09:26 PM


We can always look a lttle deeper within our emotions beyond our exterior shells and still not figure it out.  Your poem adds a nice twist to all the other "I Am" poems that I have so enjoyed reading,  Bob <><
spiked
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10 posted 2001-01-06 01:21 AM


I love this. Well written
Rich

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
11 posted 2001-01-06 02:01 AM


I am ............too !
KokoStewartKoomoa
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12 posted 2001-01-06 02:05 AM


wonderfully unique: you am! loved the style and thoughts.

Passion,imagination
and intellect
running together...
Poetry in motion~~~

Aloha with
warmest regards, Koko



tracie66
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13 posted 2001-01-06 02:15 AM


WOW!!!
Love the way you stated this, interesting write
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Poeminister
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14 posted 2001-01-06 02:33 AM


Wonderfully done.  You met the challenge excellently.  Enjoyed the read.

Poeminister

maxtec1
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15 posted 2001-01-06 06:05 AM


Thank all you my dear friends for your wonderful comments.
Love and light,
Richard

Beverley
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16 posted 2001-01-06 09:15 AM


You are perfect, and so is this

Stone walls do not a prison make
Nor iron bars a cage
Minds innocent and quiet take
That for a hermitage
If I have freedom in my love
And in my s

serenity blaze
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17 posted 2001-01-06 09:37 AM


and I am late...but so glad I made it Richard...and this is one of my favorites I think...you got me with this one...because I tell everyone that I live in a box within a box...one of my fave themes...challenge well met!!!
maxtec1
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18 posted 2001-01-06 01:49 PM


Thank you two ladies for your comments. I'm blushing.
Love anf light,
Richard

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