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Nan
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0 posted 2001-01-04 07:43 AM


I am lost and foundering without my rhyme.
I wonder how you write free verse.
I hear iambics in my mind.
I see rhyming, miming, words in timing. (oops!)
I want to structure each of them
I am lost and foundering without my rhyme.

I pretend to let words freely flow
I feel the need to write a sonnet.
I touch more hearts with my pantoums.
I worry not when penning villanelles
I cry no tears when quilling paradelles (oops!)
I am lost and foundering without my rhyme.

I understand we each have styles to write.
I say that this should surely be all right (oops!)
I dream pentameter at night (darn!)
I try to write in free verse, but I can't.
I hope to meter my next quatrain
I am lost and foundering without my rhyme.


© Copyright 2001 Nancy Ness - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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1 posted 2001-01-04 07:45 AM


this was onno the best challenges ever yuh and of course you Nan did it well
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2 posted 2001-01-04 08:39 AM


I feel lost most of the time also when I drift away from the fundamentals, this is an excellent piece, Nan.

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart

Kathleen


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3 posted 2001-01-04 09:35 AM


HA!  I found you!  BTTT!

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4 posted 2001-01-04 09:41 AM


Nan,
I don't think you'll ever be lost at anything
Love you and your poetry.

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5 posted 2001-01-04 10:05 AM


Nan...I have to second Seyemore on this   You lost? Never!
Love you and this poem too  

What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compaired to what lies within us.
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Kethry
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6 posted 2001-01-04 03:45 PM


Nan,
I could see how this could be a problem for you *laughs*. Loved it. VERY VERY tres chic, or more aptly TIC(tongue in cheek)
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



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7 posted 2001-01-04 05:24 PM


It seems that those silly rhymes just keep slipping out so you must be a poet of which there's no doubt. (darn)  Hey, just keep trying.... I know you'll do it!  ...sighing.   Love ya, Bob <><
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8 posted 2001-01-04 05:54 PM


Nan, I enjoyed reading your reply to Serenity's challenge...
You pegged the feelings marvelously well dear PoetFriend...


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9 posted 2001-01-04 06:41 PM


Evening Nan,

I must agree with most that you could never be lost. Perhaps lose your way for a little, but never lost. Excellent reply to the challenge.

BC

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10 posted 2001-01-04 06:47 PM


wonderful poetic reply..*s

~Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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11 posted 2001-01-04 08:02 PM


Nan~
You are a lighthouse to others -
you don't get lost ! !

Just keep thinking - winking - and blinking.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Daniel J D
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12 posted 2001-01-04 08:18 PM


Nan,
Great work and wonderful reply to such a challenge.

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

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13 posted 2001-01-04 08:47 PM


Nan, everything you write is so fantastic, it doesn't matter if you stick to the rules! Challenge well met, my friend.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



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14 posted 2001-01-04 08:50 PM


Delightful, Nan, one of my favorites!  

Denise

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15 posted 2001-01-04 08:54 PM


Yes, you am  
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16 posted 2001-01-05 07:28 AM


i well remember this one and i remembered i wondered bless her for being so adequate with rhyme!!

while lesser me will have to be contented with writing free verse...i hope someday those rhymes will come and consume my mind..sigh

Elizabeth Santos
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17 posted 2001-01-05 08:25 AM


Nan,
"Lost and foundering"?
If you are lost, it is in your ocean of vocabulary.
But I did enjoy the humor
Fun to read, coming from you
Liz

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18 posted 2001-01-05 02:05 PM


Hi Nan,

Wonderful and I wish I had some of that structure, you are never lost, your right here were you belong, a passions poet.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



Nan
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19 posted 2001-01-05 10:11 PM


My most humble thanks to each and every one of you very special folks who took the time to read and enjoy...God Bless...
Alwye
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20 posted 2001-01-05 11:09 PM


You can write by the rules far better than a lot of us here...in my opinion, do what you're good at!  And you are probably the best I've ever seen when it comes to that.  Keep up the wonderful poetry because I love to read it!  

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

jwesley
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21 posted 2001-01-05 11:14 PM


My dreams are dreams...I only wish I could write the way you do, Nan. Much respect here for your skills as well as the wonderful writing you do.

Now, if only I could rhyme...and all those other "things" you spoke of...


jwesley

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