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ever so humble |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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The sun is rising anger's spent as I watch the moon's descent... moss entangled from the tree dangling webs uncertainty soggy path beneath my foot upstaged by the cypress root I am wandering I am free I am lost certainly-- only certain I have known is the curtain of my home heavy in the dust of pleasure dank within the den of leisure-- ceiling fan a metronome of the comfort gloom of home the dog is smiling at my knee... tell me, what's become of ME? |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sad poem Celeste but it's also so well written with lonelines and retrospect. Chin up Acadian lass you're going to go a long way...there's things to write! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh baby...when ya find out that answer... please tell me ... I been asking it forever now... *sigh* more mirrors me twin ... my own words haunt me ... " no one ever told me ... I could get lost while standing still" (me thinks that needs to be me signature) you know, that I know, that you know ... and you also know I love this poem ... I collect them ya know ...  love ya sen me Am I loved by my words Will my vows weather the tide Bended knees can forsee all the rhythms of life And a heart can be held without pride ~Vante |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You know....I have faith in you.  |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
ceiling fan a metronome of the comfort gloom of home the dog is smiling at my knee... tell me, what's become of ME? Don't you know sweet one. You've become a charming, provocative, sensuous, delightful friend to many, admired and respected by many and a pleasure to meet! The future is straight ahead. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...and the sun is rising..  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
e? jm...PDV...Stan and sunshine...enough for a well thought party....I thank you much....and working on the rest....love to you and all the forum... |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
haunting reflections that shall strike a cord in the heart of all who read...mine included! "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
it's fun living in a swamp, huh? or was that a box in a swamp? *sighsighsigh*.... anyway... great line "upstaged by the cypress root" but... upstaged? nah... you??? no way! this is a great write, k.... i can visualize it... i can hear the ceiling fan.... i think i was sitting up with you when you wrote this... staring at my own ceiling fan... going around around around around in circles trying to figure me out.... *sigh*... luvya, girl!!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It certainly did stike a cord. I read it over and over again. "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very impressive, and I will answer that last question. (my opinion, even if not requested  )You have become a very fine poet. And you will go on from there. I know it. Sandra |
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