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Can anyone help me choose a good title? |
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chris19 New Member
since 2000-09-01
Posts 6 |
To whom it may concern, this is the first poem I have posted since february of 1999, and submittions are suspended for now, so I would appreciate the help of others to help me choose a title for my poem so that when submittions are re-opened I can have this poem posted. Here it is...as of now...UNTITLED Before I go on, this poem is about myself and my one and only love. I find myself looking back in memory to times when she seemed more like a dream then a reality. I waited for three years for her, and the wait was joyful, yet painful. But I wouldn't give up any of the pain, for it has brought me more joy then I have ever possibly dreamed. Here it is. UNTITLED As the darkness impales me I am trapped in images of you. These memories, so rich in light and contrast fail to appear in color. They only come to me in black and white. They project times when the sun beat hot upon your soften hair, and your smile brought fourth the gentle summers breeze. And moments when life became most painful, And my heart would lie still in the cold winter's eve. I lie next to you now, wondering what your immortal thoughts carry in your heart, in your soul. Do they see joys of summers past? Do they reflect pain of winter's day? I see, only in my dreams and thoughts memories that have brought me more joy then the gentle breath that escapes my forever collapsing chest. I have loved you from moments of first sight, and in moments when I was blind to the passion you so generously bestowed me.I will try my damndest to forever cherish the words of love that so romantically seep from your voice to my lonely ears. Until death becomes me, and your name is the last breath that passes through my lips, in memory, and in present, I am forever devoted to you, my love. My poems title, I will rest in your hands, my loyal poetry friends. Waiting silently for your words of wisdom, ~*~Chris~*~ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Chris.... This is a wonderful poem of devotion and true love that has seen pain, but overcame it to become even stronger. I would call this beautiful piece: "Endless" Keep writing....I'll keep reading!!  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Ladycat 
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
I have to agree with sunny on Endless. There is also Timeless. Forever. Times to Remember. What ever you choose, keep it short and sweet just like the piece. I have to say she is one luck girl that she has touched you so deeply. May your journey together be a long and prosperious one. Love, Lady Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...I like "Cherish" or "Cherish my Love" or "A Love to Cherish". James |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful penned....I am with James....Cherish....or Cherished Love. hope you will find the right tittle for this lovely piece. Charisma |
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chris19 New Member
since 2000-09-01
Posts 6 |
To all that replied...thank you soooo much for all your suggestions...And I have choosen a title for my piece. I would like to call my poem ENDLESS DEVOTION. I showed my girl friend the poem...and she almost loves the piece more then she loves me  But just "almost". From the bottom of my heart...thank you all. Keep an eye out...as soon as Ron re-opens submittions...I will be submitting this poem for all to see and know my endless devotion to my Samantha. I love you all! You are all cherished friends. With a heart felt hug to you all, ~*~Chris~*~ |
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