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a petal falls (repost ) |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
` A petal falls The stir of breeze and yet another petal falls, a tear of time. . . the lovely rose’s maker calls. However near to faultless God’s invent, however sweet the velvet rose’s scent divine, with passing time and just a breeze, even such perfection sees a sure decline. The seasons come to yield when spent, the oceans tug at moon’s descent,with tidal swing a thousand things suggest the notion, all the world’s in constant motion, everything. ********************** So if a breeze should bring a love to me, Oh, let me seize that opportunity, whatever cost. For when acquaintanceship shall pose the chance for fondness, . . .like a rose, it must be taken then or ever lost. And if our love , when in the early blossom‘s core of deep sensation grew to soar. . . . but now the changing seasons change us, and unforeseen events estrange us, don’t lament. For haven’t we the very golden prime beheld, taking roses when they sweetest smelled? . . .and with our free consent. Now memories, like petals folded in a cherished page of prose. . . . remind us sometimes hearts are molded not less nor more than like a rose. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The seasons come to yield when spent, the oceans tug at moon’s descent,with tidal swing a thousand things suggest the notion, all the world’s in constant motion, everything. =================== So if a breeze should bring a love to me, Oh, let me seize that opportunity, whatever cost. For when acquaintanceship shall pose the chance for fondness, . . .like a rose, it must be taken then or ever lost. ================ this is exquisite ... excellent...well crafted poetry lovely imagery and the complex rhyme and cadence are superb Welcome to Passions Stan so nice to have you here... looking forward to more of your work take care jm Am I loved by my words Will my vows weather the tide Bended knees can forsee all the rhythms of life And a heart can be held without pride ~Vante |
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aurora rain Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 90 |
that IS gorgeous writing. classical and beautiful and delicate writing. no rough edges there....  |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
I really enjoyed reading this beautiful writing, and hope to read many, many more by your hand.  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
Janet Marie, Aurora Rain and Sunny Thanks for your words of encouragement. This is a poem that I wrote for a special friend who had the all too familiar pain of love slipping away. It has been a favorite of mine. Glad you like it. |
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