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Crystal Walls |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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She hides housed behind crystal walls Walls she crafted with such care Decorated with crystal balls Sunlight catches, she has a flair She flirts, teases those seeking bliss A glimpse of thigh, a smile beguiles Like sleeping beauty, they want to kiss She taunts with sin words, they're her wiles She wants charming prince to free her To break down walls and for her be One, from her prison who can lure Her out to fresh air she can see The walls are strong, they're of her making And only she can do the breaking Great souls have wills; feeble ones have only wishes. ~ Chinese Proverb ~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mr. Yeats...what you have penned! This is more than wonderful...'tis the truth! Well done Sir... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very true Bill and very well expressed here! You get your points across well! I haven't found a wall yet that I can break....but I'm alive with love when she breaks it and lets me in......good stuff!! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Excellent piece here sir. But you knew that anyway didn't you? You have spoken so eloquently the truth behind finding the spirit and joy of life again. In the end, the one who builds the walls around the heart must be the one to take them down. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill-- The walls are strong, they're of her making And only she can do the breaking this is true of so many things...excellent thought and great poem! |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I liked your sonnet, reminds me of someone I know. Gloom |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
beautifully witten as always Bill We build walls Then break them apart Depending whom Is seeking ones heart Hope |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Bill, I do believe this is my favorite of yours and am going to save it...thank you *S ~Wynter Bliss..no connection with me right?..just *teasing..whoops there I go again..just kidding I mean  "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
...."and only she can do the breaking".... What a message this carries....it really shouts at me. I thank you for this one, my friend.......  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Bill this is one of my favorites..loved it  ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wilfred, I sooo love this. "The walls are strong they're of her making and only she can do the breaking" Crystal walls we all can build for the soil that we have tilled some build crystal some build stone some build to see, yet be alone some build with hope of rescue clear some still wait behing walls drear some remove a brick now and then so they may view the world again but quick retreat to hide behind the walls they've built within their mind the answer Wil, you gave the key in your write of poetry the walls are strong they're of our making and only we can do the breaking. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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kindasorta Member
since 2000-12-02
Posts 56 |
from sunlight to crystal..where is feed? enjoyed this lots winfred. good write |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
How true... but the support of a friend can prove a powerful sledgehammer. *S* Well done! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Could be two of the best closing lines I've ever seen, Bill......very well done! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"The walls are strong, they're of her making And only she can do the breaking" wow..those are some powerful lines there..truth is more powerful than anything else.. and its true that the builder of such a wall is the only one who can decide when the wall comes down.. wonderful write.. hugs, g "people who need people are the luckiest people..." barbra s. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A tender eye you have my friend, a tender eye. Corinne |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Everyone - I've precious little time "online" - so a blanket thanks to you all for such wonderful responses. A special thanks to Kethry and Hope I must give because I do so love poetry. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
How true your words are...the two closing lines are phenomenal. Wonderful poetry! *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Alwye- I'm most appreciative of your reading and responding - Thank you so much |
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