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The Hourglass
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The Hourglass |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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The Hourglass Another year has fast appeared New light of dawn has cast Its prism spear into the fear And grief of hours past Forget the old of sorrow’s hold Bring in the bliss of new The tales untold in secret’s fold Will rise up with the dew When I shall pass the hourglass I’ll praise the falling sands And humbly ask that they unmask The joy that’s in their hands And I will fish for dreamer’s wish In currents of the sea In playfull swish of tropic fish A dream awaits for me I’ll pluck regret from fishers net And keep the golden catch The silhouette of pain’s forget I’ll pour into the hatch The day has come, the early sun Shines hope upon my brow And happiness will truly bless The year upon us now Come dream with me of sparkly sea In glow of sunset reds A net is cast upon the past In silver spider threads Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-02-2001).] |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
What an absolute treasure... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Elizabeth: What an absolutely enjoyable read! great flow and images... *smiles* -Tier |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Once again you show the beauty and power of your poetry. Love Sy |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
When I shall pass the hourglass I’ll praise the falling sands And humbly ask that they unmask The joy that’s in their hands ==================== I’ll pluck regret from fishers net And keep the golden catch The silhouette of pain’s forget I’ll pour into the hatch =============== Come dream with me of sparkly sea In glow of sunset reds A net is cast upon the past In silver spider threads ================ I dont know if I can pick what is more perfect and impressive here... the use of metaphor is for sure, as is the imagery, then add the cadence and rhyme ... all wrapped up in your wisdom and poetic grace. wonderful writing Liz... work them metaphors   jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A most magical timely piece... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Absolutely beautiful, Elizabeth! Lovely! Denise |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Superb dear poet, simply superb! What a magical and perfect flow this held throughout, and the imagery ... oh Liz ... just beautiful!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Well it's unanimous - this is a gem! Phenomenal flow, imagery and message! Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my friend~ What a beautiful thing to have written. 'The day has come, the early sun Shines hope upon my brow And happiness will truly bless The year upon us now' You send me a smile - and I wear it broadly. Thank you, sweet lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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emily Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 142USA |
This is amazing verse. Everything is so special, but the line I love most is "When I shall pass the hourglass I’ll praise the falling sands" beautiful, Elizabeth.< !signature--> Emily [This message has been edited by emily (edited 01-01-2001).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Excellent penned......enjoyed this wonderful gem very much. thanks for sharing.... (warm hugs) Charisma |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Mike, My treasure hunter Tiersdin, Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you Seymour, Thank you, sweet poet JM, THanks for your kind words and encouragement Sunshine, THank you, Say, didn't they vote you "most prolifically perfect poetess of the year"? Denise, Thanks, neighbor KIt, You warm my heart Melissa, It's unanimous, Everyone's been so kind in your comments, including you Marge, Thanks for the smiles Emily, THank you for your comment Charisma, THank you, dear poet Liz |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, Liz, your courage and strength never fails to amaze me! This poem is a masterpiece, and so meticulously worded - a message of hope - I continue to pray for you. I'm so glad you have your children, and your faith. I'm so glad God gave you such an enormous talent! |
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