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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-12-31 01:37 PM


Commiseration

Non but I can see her beauty
They, a normal lovely.
She that caught my essence being
Through an inner seeing.

Plain that turned to beauties blind
Is but a state of mind
But magic happens when we meet
And love is the receipt.

The web is commiseration
Touch and visitation
And laurels fall at beck and call
That grow you ten foot tall.

And every morsel fills your aim
Lighting strikes setting flame.
Within wild honey of amour
In fields of evermore.

It is the substance of your goal
And the copulate of your soul.


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Denise
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1 posted 2000-12-31 02:26 PM


'She that caught my essence being
Through and inner seeing.' That's how it all starts, doesn't it? This is beautiful, Seymour!

Denise

brian madden
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2 posted 2000-12-31 02:30 PM


The web is commiseration
Touch and visitation
And laurels fall at beck and call
That grow you ten foot tall.

wow a very beautiful poem, sigh tender words and wonderful images


It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious
Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy

Sven
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3 posted 2000-12-31 02:35 PM


"the web is commiseraton"

how true, how true. . .

excellent Sir. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Mike
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4 posted 2000-12-31 02:53 PM


Well penned. enjoyed.
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2000-12-31 03:40 PM


Denise,
Thank you for the read and beautiful.

Brian,
Thank you for the WOW.

Sven,
Thank you my friend for the excellent.

Mike,
Appreciate the well penned.

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2000-12-31 03:40 PM


in thy beauty of your pen
you weave the way to which you wend...

always shall I look for thee
here within the heart of me...

and this is what you do to my mind...
thank you Sy...

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
7 posted 2000-12-31 03:46 PM


I was going to copy only the lines I liked best which I rarely do anyway but found out that I loved each and every one of them.  SO here they are.

Plain that turned to beauties blind
Is but a state of mind
But magic happens when we meet
And love is the receipt.

The web is commiseration
Touch and visitation
And laurels fall at beck and call
That grow you ten foot tall.

And every morsel fills your aim
Lighting strikes setting flame.
Within wild honey of amour
In fields of evermore.

It is the substance of your goal
And the copulate of your soul.

============================

Excellent writing sir.  I am truely impressed for sure.  I am learning from you and I am loving the temptation of streching out because of some of your works.  For that I thank you.


Janet Marie
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8 posted 2000-12-31 03:51 PM


She that caught my essence being
Through an inner seeing.
=================
But magic happens when we meet
And love is the receipt.

The web is commiseration
Touch and visitation
And laurels fall at beck and call
That grow you ten foot tall.

And every morsel fills your aim
Lighting strikes setting flame.
Within wild honey of amour
In fields of evermore.

It is the substance of your goal
And the copulate of your soul.
================

laurels?? we dont need no stinkin laurels  
they only get in the way of making magic
*winkiewinkie*
your so cool I gotta wear me mittens to reply to ya
later-I'll give a receipt-gator
me

Some people find subtlety in strangers
if you find anything~let me in
Your eyes~you see everything
my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2000-12-31 06:41 PM


Karilea,
That's the sweetest thing I've read tonight. *L*

Mark,
Beautiful comment, you do me honor.

Sunshine
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10 posted 2000-12-31 06:48 PM


Sy
{~,^}
Happy New Year
2001
will be
good to us
and all of
the poets
here

Kit McCallum
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11 posted 2000-12-31 06:54 PM


"It is the substance of your goal
And the copulate of your soul."

Wonderful Seymour ... beautifully worded, and I just have to say that I love the flow ... cause I do, great rhythm!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2001-01-01 08:40 AM


JM,
Happy New Year, your randy gator. WWS

Sunshine,
Just stay the way you are. Happy New Year. *L*

Kit,
May the cupid of the New Year hit you in the *A* with his arrow for a wonderful happy New Year.

[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 01-01-2001).]

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
13 posted 2001-01-01 09:29 AM


This feeling or expression of sympathy you have very cleverly turned into a wonderful love poem....and oh that second verse what a verse of sage wisdom...though heard a thousand times there is always another way to say it  and you have penned it wonderfully!

"Plain that turned to beauties blind
is but a state of mind
But magic happens when we meet
and love is the reciept."

Love it man I love it!

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
14 posted 2001-01-01 02:40 PM


Sy
beautiful
Keth


Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon.


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