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athena4
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0 posted 2000-12-30 09:14 PM


                 Travesty

I know,
that when I think of you
and I
and the summer your warmed in my skin
the dreams you conjured in my eyes
and all the fantasies you built
in my life...

I see beauty.

But to you,
I know it's all just a travesty
that you wrestle with
everytime you wonder

...why you ever showed me beauty at all.

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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2000-12-30 09:21 PM


so I question...what was learned...and will it last?...

well done!

Sven
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2 posted 2000-12-30 10:03 PM


surely you have learned, as Sunshine said. . .

Elise, you keep amazing me. . .    wonderful words. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-12-30 11:15 PM


Do we ever learn? I don't know, but this is wonderful.
He was a fool, obviously.
Sandra

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
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4 posted 2000-12-31 01:26 AM


well, i always say this...if at first you don't succeed, quit!... er.. i mean... do unto others and then split!... no WAIT! that's not it...... umm...er, i mean... home is where the hard is... oh phooey... i'm gonna get this right yet... umm... i say something.. uh... ok... i got it!... ready? here it is...you only live once so grab for all the gusto you can get... awwww dammit!!!... that's a beer commercial...
*sigh*

well, when i think of what i always say, i'll let you know and come back to this thread or just write a poem about it or something but for now... lemme just say this...

loved your poem!!!!


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