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SpitFire
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0 posted 2000-12-30 07:09 PM


In Attempt To Steal The Garnet Skins of Dream

Papered dry and garnet teased
in spaces bleached for your approval,
an erasure of the unhealthy taking.
There were too many secrets etched
to wait another day.
I could have washed my hair again
or just sprayed the scent of yesterday
across the frame to you, a sip between
the one too manys, a swing of sight
into your world. I was papered dry,
I was germ free, and teased with garnet halves.
And it feels as if stones are weighing down
my eyelids, for I've lost my way again
and wandered too far from the safety of you
and the distance of truths swallowed in shame.
I forgot the time and wasted the hours
inside myself, in circles falling.
I never meant to come across so sure.  
I wasn't sure about anything.
I have a hard time believing in
the trip tales outside of coffee shops
all spilling and burning your mind.  
What a waste to think it mattered,
to have had that chance to play in the rain,
to forget the hour inside yourself.
I put me on a shelf for years,
aside from learning to feed and house and love.
I swirl for then and fight to keep my eyes alive,
reject the weighted sin, the heavy pains
accustom to the reality around here.
I figure I'd either walk from you or
turn around and run, but where's the fun
and wasn't that why this all began?
I fell here, parrallel to your episodes,
swimming in the middle of steel frames,
stamped with prints of lips in line,
in attempt to steal the
garnet skins of
dream.



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EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...
1 posted 2000-12-30 07:43 PM


Reading your words here it feels like a great weight falling across my shoulders. But then I could be picking up the wwrong vibes, again!   Take care my friend, and peace to you!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.



athena4
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2 posted 2000-12-30 07:57 PM


Spitfire,
    What beautiful imagery. I feel like I am there, and at one time I was.  Your incredible words bring this sad epic to life.
        Elise

Irish Rose
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3 posted 2000-12-30 08:02 PM


Your metaphor is astounding.  I'm so glad I read this one!

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart

Kathleen



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4 posted 2000-12-30 08:20 PM


SpitFire~
You write melancholy like no one else -

'I could have washed my hair again
or just sprayed the scent of yesterday
across the frame to you'


Quite the read you've given us.
Well done.
~*Marge*~



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catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
5 posted 2000-12-30 08:56 PM


Hi, wow, you have said it again, what a spectacular write.
Hope you have a peaceful, and maybe happy New Years Eve.
Sandra

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2000-12-30 08:59 PM


Spitfire, sometimes we want others to see into our words, sometimes we do not...I closed my eyes and repeated certain lines, and perhaps I saw the Garnet of the poem...

well done...

very well done....

tracie66
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7 posted 2000-12-30 09:01 PM


Oh what a spectacular read my friend, just so incredibly visual and expressed...well penned
~HUGS~
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Sven
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8 posted 2000-12-30 10:07 PM


excellent SpitFire. . . indeed you have the gift. . .

well done my friend. . .  

-------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


SpitFire
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9 posted 2000-12-31 01:49 PM


~Eddie, thank you for coming by. You're doing fine  . Appreciate you.
~Elise, thank you. Much. I took your reply straight to my heart.
~Kathleen, thank you thank you for that!
~Marge, thanks for stopping in and leaving your words. You're sweet.
~Sandra, hi sweets! Thank you for reading me. ~ I'll e you. You have yourself an awesome New Year's Eve too and we can cross our fingers together and wish for a year of heart smiles ahead. C'mon!
~Sunshine, I truly appreciate the effort involved in your reading of this. THAT makes it all worth it. Loved your reply. Thank you.
~Tracie, hi you! Thank you for stopping in, for leaving your words and for your hugs, thank you.
~Sven, nice to see you. Thank you for what you said. You guys are swell!  .
*Peace.

brian madden
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10 posted 2000-12-31 03:09 PM


I think this would have to be one of favourites from your pen. You have out done yourself here, excellent piece. I can feel the sadness heavy in the words, hope everything is ok. Peace, take care my porch friend.  

It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious
Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy

redheart angrybraids
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11 posted 2002-08-04 05:56 AM


aaaahhhhhh,
this is my  kind of poetry, i loved it,loved it loved it, where have you beem?

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids


redheart angrybraids
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12 posted 2002-08-24 06:43 AM


i am serious
i love this every sentence is paper mind, easy to resongnate

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids


serenity blaze
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13 posted 2008-03-11 03:17 PM


"I put me on a shelf for years,"

Indeed--where are you lady?

(for that matter, where am I?)


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