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She Weeps No More
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She Weeps No More |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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She Weeps No More Amidst a world of deep despair, She walks among you, unaware; No promise held in hopes of late, As quietly she suffocates. She lives a life of futile dreams, As sorrow flows in silent screams; A life of pain and languished years, Have washed away the fallen tears. She cannot look beyond today, Her future masked in shades of gray; She lives her days on borrowed time, A life in limbo, fate unkind. She grips the past and holds her ground, Attempts to thrive beyond the bounds That tie her to this emptiness ... This vast expanse of nothingness. A woeful creature, inwardly, She bares her pain for none to see; Amongst a world of gloom and strife, She carries on her lot in life. Bereft of feeling, lost in soul, She lingers on with self-control; Emotions gone , no longer kept, Her tears are dry ... no longer wept. /Kit McCallum [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 01-01-2001).] |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Very nice... well written, enjoyed muchly. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kit~ This is sooooooo sad. Well written - great cadence - but sooooooo sad. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh Dear God, this touched me. Thank you, Kit. "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Seems that you have peeked in my heart when you wrote this one, my friend. wonderful penned, and it reflect a lot of my feelings now. thanks for sharing. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
she waits for one to cry her tears to calm her heart, erase her fears so still she waits for that one day when love will come and take her away beautiful. . . simply beautiful. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Aside from the words, perfect structure, and thoughts behind the lines...this poem ain't so hot....LOL!!  you're awesome, Kit |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Mike: I'm glad you enjoyed Mike, thank you! ~Marge: I tried to write something that would be more positive Marge, but when the doc calls and wants to "talk" about more test results, I'm afraid I'm in for it again. Sigh ... I've about had enough ... it never ends, but I'm a little too tired to worry or care anymore. Guess this is what comes from my wandering mind ... love ya Marge. ~Irish Rose: Thank you for this heartfelt response Kathleen ... hugs to you for feeling it. ~Charisma: Sigh ... you too Charisma? Hugs right back to you my friend ... ~Sven: You're so sweet Sven ... thank you for these lovely words, hugs to you. ~Balladeer: Leave it to you to make me laugh Michael, thank you ... I needed that!  Much appreciation to all, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 12-30-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Dear Kit,...this is so well written, heavy, and truly affective. Take care you. *Peace. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WHOA ... what an awesome write... what a melancholy dark beauty. superb emote and expression Kit I've felt many of these emotions .. me thinks many of us poets have ... always grateful to have the writing to express it. excellent writing me girlie later-weeping weave-gator jm Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Kit, A well written verse of deep despair, with your words coming from within. At least that is the way I see the writing. A smile to you Kit, from BC., BC |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Once in awhile it feels good to read a sad poem because it is written so superbly and this is one of those times. I am not celebrating sadness at all but instead the beauty and depth of emotions in this one. Excellent write and now I say one for the library. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Kit, of all the poetry you have blessed my eyes to read and of all the rhymes that have touched my heart in your loving way of expression this one poem is my #1 favorite of all time... My eyes are filled with pockets of tears dear lady... This truly is an exquisitely written emotionally touching poem that just tugs at the heart and breathes sighs into the soul... Happy New Year PoetFriend My sincere thanks for this spectacular read... Coco |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Ooopsie, I forgot to thread to library... I'll get it for sure this time... Coco |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
She'll weep no more when comes the day, Clouds of change have blown away. Loved this one although sad, I always like to think there is hope. Looking for that man vs. animal poem don't mind me...off I go searching. |
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