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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2000-12-30 12:17 PM



In silence I walk
that I may capture
echo's of your voice
guiltless

a dream lived

now
so dark is the morn
cold, lonely,
the warmth has left, leaving
one confused and
without the purest of
greetings

a dream lost

between fingers illusive,
weak, and with hope
but  nerve's rattle and hiss
still,
having to face the
face of falsity

a dream held

deep within eyes, dimmed
in a helpless state
though never to be
sealed

a time,

taken by tides
of black shores


Maree Russo
30 Dec 2000


< !signature-->

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this wouldn't be enough"
"Maree Russo"



[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 12-31-2000).]

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Sven
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1 posted 2000-12-30 12:20 PM


excellent DA. . .

I feel that we all know this feeling. . .

--------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Denise
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2 posted 2000-12-30 12:21 PM


Oh, Maree, this is so heartbreaking, so sad. You have expressed the pain well. HUGS

Denise

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2000-12-30 12:24 PM


Again, I say this is sad....and well written, my friend.
JulieAnn
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Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!
4 posted 2000-12-30 12:54 PM


Very good....expressive.....

Julie :)



Dark Enchantress
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5 posted 2000-12-30 01:20 AM


All I can say is ditto. lol I agree with everyone else...this was sad but in that very same way it was excellent.   Leave it to me to find beauty in darkness. lol

Wonderful Maree!

Angel


I am no one if not myself.

~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~


Martie
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6 posted 2000-12-30 01:32 AM


Hugs!
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2000-12-30 05:56 AM


I'm with you, sista!!!

Face of falsity...

hard to look at, I know...
felt like this one was written for me...
but sorry that you felt this too.

more hugs?

Poertree
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since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359
UK
8 posted 2000-12-30 09:13 AM


Wait, wait!! there must be some misunderstanding .... i just went away for a few days...lol...  

what hast brought on this dark mood O usually cheerful one. quit living up to your inappropriate name - just coz you write your best poetry when you're gloomy, that's no excuse.  now c'mere and get thee under that there mistletoe ......~grin~

  

happy newish year

wol

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
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9 posted 2000-12-30 05:42 PM


Mmy...I think it's the title that makes it seem so despairing lovey...

lollol...

(Now I need to talk to you about the word albeit...)

lovely writing as usual

  Tigs

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athena4
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10 posted 2000-12-30 08:39 PM


Beautiful!
       Elise

Dark Angel
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11 posted 2000-12-30 08:46 PM


Sven, Denise, Sharon, JulieAnn, DE, Martie and me Sista, thank you all for your lovely and sweet hugging replies   I didnt think this would sound as sad as it apparantly does, it does stem from a sadness yes but this is a poem which I wrote months ago, well and I've added and trimmed it lol.
I thank you all for your concerned  

Oh Sista, yes after reading your poetry lately, this could be written for you... so Hugs dear.

Hey Wol, I am full of surprises arent I ?
no seriously, like I wrote above, it is just me trimming and shaving and snipping a poem lol.....
Oh so now Cowboy, you want me under that there mistletoe hey???  hmmmm this could be very interesting   well there is just over 10 hours before we countdown the NEW YEAR!
so whaddya say Pardner?  

Tig, you may talk to me about that word "albeit", (I bet I have used it wrong hehe,I am getting ready for another lecture!) as long as you stop bouncing around ok, tigerrrrrrr bounce! bounce!

hey love the lectures btw  


Well Thank you all for your lovely replies and for t aking the time to read  

Wishing you all a HAPPY NEW YEAR!

Maree

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this wouldn't be enough"
"Maree Russo"


tracie66
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12 posted 2000-12-30 08:52 PM



DA~
God this was so sad and yet so beautiful, you've penned your feelings extremely well little one...well done
Tracie~
~HUGS~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
13 posted 2000-12-30 09:50 PM


a dream lived, a dream lost, a dream held, a time....

Excellent! I like this one a lot.


"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.



Lady Lightning
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14 posted 2000-12-31 12:01 PM


Such a wonderful, powerful statement made in just a few words...Face of falsity..I must agree with serenity, hard to look at and yes this most surely could have been written for me as I have looked at falsity more times than I care to remember.Even so I truly enjoyed this peice...Very good work...Hugs and a Happy New Year to you... ~LL~

The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown

Jamie
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Blue Heaven
15 posted 2001-01-04 07:30 PM


Though dreams be swept from shores of black out to a sea of darkness--- the memory of them shall remain and become a lighthouse for our hopes and future dreams. I really really Love this Maree... Love it!< !signature-->


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".  





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