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Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
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Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2000-12-28 03:10 PM


Listen
hear the silence
of the eerie
hallowed halls.
Heavy footsteps echo
cause theres no one
left to call.

Laughter once
in triumph rang
throughout the happy rooms.

Sunshine touched
each window pain
now nothings left but gloom.

Horror struck
with swiftest hand
two lovers died in vain.

Lost to greed
of evil hearts
whos loves for not
but pain.

But yet in mists
of moon kissed night
her hand upon his heart.

They stroll the halls
of evermore
A love that none can part.



© Copyright 2000 Marilyn - All Rights Reserved
Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

1 posted 2000-12-28 03:14 PM


no!  wake them up, they haven't loved yet!  < !signature-->

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart




[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 12-28-2000).]

LngJhnAg
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2 posted 2000-12-28 03:18 PM


All right, ya lil tease.  There's gotta be more to this story than this.  C'mon - how far did they go before they were cut short.  I wanna know!  You've left me needing more, fer cryin' out loud!
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2000-12-28 03:58 PM


Marilyn~
There's always a first !
And for the FIRST time - I agree with LongJohn ... shhhh !

This is a hauntingly lovely piece.
~*Marge*~


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Sven
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4 posted 2000-12-28 08:03 PM


wonderful Marilyn. . .

haunting and melodic. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Denise
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5 posted 2000-12-28 09:43 PM


This is great writing, Marilyn. I can feel the gloom, the sadness. Very good writing, indeed.

Denise

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