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in my silent disarray
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in my silent disarray |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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The beating of my heart is but the hammer of a carpenter he lives within my chest he's just the rhythm of my song of yours he is there when you foreswear love it is forever gone he sings to me in harmony writing lyric to the song artistry of cradle's rock a poet in a muse's long the memory of love forgot re-written, in a truce, belong... My fingers raise to touch my cheek I weep the silent disbelief I do not wish to laugh again I do not wish to call you friend If love were but one kiss astray I would have wished you far away and wished you back again today in my silent disarray... [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 12-27-2000).] |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"If love were but one kiss astray I would have wished you far away and wished you back again today in my silent disarray..." Said it so eloquently ... - well done |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I just can't pick a favoured section, I love it all. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I envy your poem (beautiful) but I don't envy the mood you must be in, to have written it Rex |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
writing lyric to the song artistry of cradle's rock a poet in a muse's long the memory of love forgot re-written, in a truce, belong... My fingers raise to touch my cheek I weep the silent disbelief I do not wish to laugh again I do not wish to call you friend If love were but one kiss astray I would have wished you far away and wished you back again today in my silent disarray... ===================== oh me twin ... this is ... SO YOU this is signature Sen ... and its perfect and its poetry in motion ... and it plays me heartstrings like an acoustic guitar. put me down for a ditto on Rex's reply. love ya baby me |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
How perfectly you have written this.....so stirring and so eloquent.. Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Very nicely penned. Enjoyed muchly. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
the memory of love forgot re-written, in a truce, belong... sighing as I can feel this poem.. ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all. Poet people are GOOD. I love you, ALL ((((((((((((((passion's poets)))))))))))))))) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
There are just sooooo many steps we take when we're adjusting our emotional inner being... You've captured that experience nicely, my friend...  |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Serenity, lately you have been writing some things that grab my heart even more than usual. This is just amazing. Thanks for writing my thoughts so much better than I do.. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, the ying and yang silently rock... well done little one... |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Wow! (for lack of a better word) This SO hit home with me. Excellent writing! sp I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Serenity. So very well expressed! Denise |
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