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Among Nights Of Fire And Phrase
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Among Nights Of Fire And Phrase |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Among Nights Of Fire And Phrase I never caught, I couldn't catch, I didn't save your tears. I was bare then and running, shouting lyrics all mulberry waxed and heated, in strides of reason, in streets untamed. It was quiet through the wind and I think my smile, half breathing, answered for losing just the one of you, the birthstone of a candied year, what an accomplishment! And when shade rests on the face of youth it's a painful truth that you're undone. I saved the green all dried and earth sticks fragile with age, with history. I saved the finger lockings on cotton treasure, I saved a thought roll or two. And I could see through to the ocean floor when you spoke like that, I could sense the danger in your unknown, in the inability to understand my gig card mentality. Was I available for questioning when you doubted for that one second that I would see the sky? I try like hell to spring, to live, to laugh with you. I'd play guitar in the snow and wash the sores with song, I knew what went on. I grew up and down a dozen times since then, I felt a thousand souls beneath my feet and saved a tear or two for one of you but lost it on the way. Are you proud of who I am, are you lost in who you are? Tracing little footsteps, dirty. Old chemical smiles and empty love, to lost, in quiet,...in life, among nights of fire, and phrase. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Fire, I love this, it is so smooth. I particularly like "I grew up and down a dozen times since then" write on, be strong Keth Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I do like the way you write, loved the the opening two lines! Take care! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Kethry, thanks you! For stopping in. And yeah,...I have grown, both up and down a thousand times since then. *sigh* ~ Love. ~Eagle, hey there! Thank you friend for reading! *Peace. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
great one SpitFire!! love the images that you used in this one. . . excellent!! ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hey, good to see you again. Another interesting and thought provoking write from you. Peace Sandra |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Better up & down than out, eh?  in the inability to understand my gig card mentality. This really jabs you - I dig and understand this phrase completely lady friend. C |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
time to retreat to my metaphorical porch and take a closer look at this poem, wow a lot to think about here, reads like a masterclass in life. Wonderfully written poem. < !signature--> In the morning I am a recluse,lost in memory,ideal situations and convulsions... They built pop mart for Bono so he could gaze out across the bay aand sing about mountains maybe" whipping boy [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 12-28-2000).] |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hey there, ya lil Spitfire - great poem. I read it twice, even. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I, like Brian, have retreated to the porch...to analyze why I'm in a mood now after reading this. I like those that put me in a mood. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And I could see through to the ocean floor when you spoke like that, I could sense the danger in your unknown, in the inability to understand my gig card mentality. Was I available for questioning when you doubted for that one second that I would see the sky? I try like hell to spring, to live, to laugh with you. I'd play guitar in the snow and wash the sores with song, I knew what went on. I grew up and down a dozen times since then, I felt a thousand souls beneath my feet and saved a tear or two for one of you but lost it on the way. ============================ damn ...................... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Brother isn't that the bottom line (s)! Are you proud of who I am, are you lost in who you are? Great piece of writing. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
So much here to savor... "And when shade rests on the face of youth it's a painful truth that you're undone." ...yeah.  |
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