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This is my first poem online so be ruthless
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This is my first poem online so be ruthless |
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yroc New Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3 |
Sky and Sea are You and Me Wrapped in the hazy idea of dawn, Rapt to the dim form of You. i felt the soft warmth of your soul The soft curves in the grey blue light. Touching lips to cheek to boiling night And flying through the mists from You to You. Land and Sea and Sky are One As i with You; awkwardly then beautifully Sacredly joined with You inside of You. Loving in You and me and touch of need with plains of Love, Tumbling up and through 'Till Love erases need and Write's it's own story inside You and me. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi yroc, No need to be ruthless, this is wonderful, very much enjoyed, and welcome to Passions, hope to see more of your work. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Here here, I agree. This is nicely done. Tastefully worded. Take care now. *Peace. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I liked the feel of this too!  Welcome!"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Very nice yroc... welcome... Maybe you should repost this in the critical analysis section of passions. They give you all the critique you want. Parker |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well, I am Ruthless, she left me for Edgar last year... but what the hey... enjoyed the poem and welcome to Passions... nicely written. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! This is a marvelous first post! Check your e-mail for a special greeting! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Cory (oops) yuh tiz a fine first post |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful! Welcome to Passions! Denise |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
yroc...I'm new to passions too ......just wanted to say ..........romantic.......very nice. 1slick_lady |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
This is so lovely a really beautiful fine piece from you. Welcome to Passions, this is wonderful Take care Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
Welcome...This is good..very good... Look forward to reading more from you.. ~LL~The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
yroc~ great first post...keep em comin Warm welcome to passions Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Yroc~  Welcome! This is really a great entry......I enjoyed this......I hope you post more....... -SEA |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautifully tender and softly sensual...a pleasure to read...welcome to Passions. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
very lovely...almost wish I had written it *s welcome ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Welcome to Passions and as you have read from the rest. No need to be ruthless on this piece. It was a gem to read and the thoughts and emotions were very well conveyed. I will be looking for more from you. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
yroc: I am new also and I don't know how to be ruthless, yet. I liked you poem and will look for more. Welcome to Passions ME |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Happy Holidays With Peace, and A big Welcome to passions, you will be right at home here..... Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family, no need to fear us, we are not going to bite..well..at least not very hard!  |
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