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1slick_lady
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since 12-22-2000
[First Post] 6147
standing on a shadow's lace


0 posted 12-26-2000 07:35 PM       View Profile for 1slick_lady   Email 1slick_lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit 1slick_lady's Home Page   View IP for 1slick_lady

you


you
ask me
to write
so others
will know
how I feel
ok, now
I open up
remember
it's my blood
that I spill
my heart
it pours
such incredible love
lost within the pain
and yet
I am now open
it's true,
I still remain

© Copyright 2000 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
CareBear3
Junior Member
since 11-20-2000
Posts 39
New Hampshire


1 posted 12-26-2000 08:27 PM       View Profile for CareBear3   Email CareBear3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CareBear3

This is really good, is it supposed to be in the shape of a knife?  Either way this is really effective and intricate.....but at the same time very powerful.

"In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable"

~Kelley
shinamoon
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since 12-07-2000
Posts 15
Daytona Beach, usa


2 posted 12-26-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for shinamoon   Email shinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shinamoon

    nice and strong  and true
like something i'd have written  looking forward to reading more
kaile
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since 02-06-2000
Posts 5323
singapore


3 posted 12-26-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

welcome to passions....

i liked the poem which you have chosen to make your entry with...yup,true words spoken, we all write for an audience to reveal ourselves...nice thoughts
1slick_lady
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since 12-22-2000
Posts 6147
standing on a shadow's lace


4 posted 12-27-2000 07:08 PM       View Profile for 1slick_lady   Email 1slick_lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit 1slick_lady's Home Page   View IP for 1slick_lady

CareBear3, shinamoon, & kaile .......Thank you for the warm words or welcome....my fears of joining the passions family have been eased & look foward to being a "real" family member..............enchanted 1slick_lady

maxtec1
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since 12-09-2000
Posts 587
Garland, Tx


5 posted 12-27-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for maxtec1   Email maxtec1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit maxtec1's Home Page   View IP for maxtec1

Very good writing. Welcome to passions. Writing is very helpful when dealing with pain or so it is for me.
Love and light,
Richard
BloomingRose
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since 08-09-2000
Posts 3124
Florida


6 posted 12-27-2000 07:23 PM       View Profile for BloomingRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BloomingRose

Welcome to Passions! Great first write, full of heartfelt emotions, yet straight to the point.
Look forward to reading more of your work.
Deb  
spiked
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since 01-13-2000
Posts 886
Hammond, La USA


7 posted 12-27-2000 07:30 PM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Beautiful start and welcome to the real world Slick. Nice Job .
Rich
serenity blaze
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since 02-02-2000
Posts 28839


8 posted 12-28-2000 04:11 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I am now open
it's true,
I still remain


I think that these are my favorite lines.
Welcome to the forum, Helen. And life is short, GO FOR IT.

bslicker
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since 12-04-2000
Posts 2416
state of mind


9 posted 01-03-2001 09:22 PM       View Profile for bslicker   Email bslicker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bslicker

gj helen
jwesley
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since 04-30-2000
Posts 6413
Texas . . .


10 posted 01-03-2001 09:27 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Now this I really like.  Everything about it.
The words, the flow, the feelings, the form...well done, my friend.

jwesley
Krawdad
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since 01-03-2001
Posts 2627


11 posted 08-18-2013 12:13 AM       View Profile for Krawdad   Email Krawdad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krawdad

Helen's first post.
Lady Goodman
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since 10-04-2012
Posts 191


12 posted 08-18-2013 01:43 AM       View Profile for Lady Goodman   Email Lady Goodman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lady Goodman

Made me smie...

Thank you, "e".

 
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