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The Lamb That Turned To Lion
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The Lamb That Turned To Lion |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite The Lamb That Turned To Lion Once when prudence turned to foolish A change touched issue to my brow A wily blow was brought to bear On the vent of some cats meow. A simple comment named as lamb. Rose up to be a Lions' roar. And the subtle sword of cunning Cut chaos on my Cupid's door. Chivalry died and bellied up Sensitivity went to smell. Jealousy that shapeless monster Opened a crack the doors of hell. And the barb found the hearts tender By the shaft of a selfish floor. And the wound turned a poisons doubt Just strong enough to kill amour. A lamb that beast a lions roar And made a feast of poor seymour. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"On the vent of some cat's meow" eh! well that kind of sets it all up doesn't it? No roast of lamb over the holidays Seymour? It'll be kind of hard to get the other one into the oven...talking about a barb finding a heart's tender whew..and I opened this up thinking it was going to be something religious like the lamb of God or something.. ya just can't trust a poet to do what you think they're gonna do....have a nice holiday and take care....ethome |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
And the wound turned a poisons doubt my favorite line in your poem. This was very clever and very expressive. Excellent work! May your Christmas be merry and warm with love! Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: This part brought back some painful memories...I won't delve nor dwell...but I do not think I would choose another way to say what it is I felt then, as the words you have put to it now... you always stretch my imagination, and my smile...even when it is a sad smile... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
On the vent of some cats meow. ====================== Cut chaos on my Cupid's door. ===================== Chivalry died and bellied up Sensitivity went to smell. =================== Jealousy that shapeless monster Opened a crack the doors of hell. =================== And the barb found the hearts tender By the shaft of a selfish floor. ================== And the wound turned a poisons doubt Just strong enough to kill amour. ================= these are some of the coolest and unique lines of poetry I have ever read ... such intriguing cryptic confessions and emotions Sy-guy amazing use of metaphor and imagery amazing poetry ... amazing poet did I ever tell ya ... I am one of those jealous types too  better warn that randy dragon of yours LOL *winkiewinkie* later-so way cool-gator me Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Haven't eaten cooked lion in a while, But as I remember them their pretty tough. Merry Christmas and thank you. Koko, Thanks for the excellent and have a nice holiday. Karilea, Beaytiful comment, happy holiday. *L* JM, Loved your bouquet. Did you say warm up my randy dragon? He's overcooked now. LOL Winkiewinkie Stinky |
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