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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
I have a friend and her daughter 13 years old has suffered a massive stroke. She is in very bad shape. She has lost all motor functions. The doctors say she don’t have lots of time left. Her MOM and sisters need lots of prayers and support. Can you think of what it must be like to have this happen to one of your kids. Her Mom asked me to write a poem for her daughter. I am at a loss of what or how to write this poem. Here are a couple of starts. Please tell me what you think. Thanks Love and light, Richard Brightest Star By Richard Maxfield 12-22-2000 Brightest star Shinning bright Aluminates The darkest night Shinning through Though clouds surround With sprinkles of love Raining down Touching hearts With brilliant gold Giving love For all to hold My brightest star Will always shine Bring warmth To this heart of mine Special One By Richard Maxfield 12-22-2000 Very few such souls Does God make To spread his love For mortals sake With special care He created you For just a job Only you can do He let you go For just a while To spread his joy Bring a smile In my hands His special one To love and hold My shinning sun First smile seen On shinning face Forever earned Your loving place [This message has been edited by maxtec1 (edited 12-22-2000).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
maxtec1 good poems both. *HuGS and prayers* to you and your friend. Keth Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
My friend. I agree, both are good, but since you've not yet chosen what to present, try writing one from the childs perspective as another choice; if you know her, what do you think she'd want to say at a time like this if she could, both to her parents, (relatives) and friends. What would be her thoughts, her passions, her desires for the one's she'll leave behind. What does she see ahead. And remember, it doesn't have to rhyme, especially now, so leave that option open too; it may, in fac, be easier to just write, as if in a letter, then pick what you want, and how you want to say it. Matter of fact, just ramble on about anything you can think of about her, whether it's from her view or another's...then pick what you want to finalize from all you've gathered. Just some thoughts... jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 12-22-2000).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Richard, both beautiful and wonderful poems, I couldn't choose they are lovely. All I can suggest is that you ask for prayers for her. Prayers are powerful things, and there are so many here who could help. I will light a candle for her in our hospital chapel. It always has someone in there, it's a busy little place. Take care Marsha Sending hugs and prayers. Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* oh Richard, tears come to the eyes easily when one reads the beautiful words you have written as tribute. Much love and many prayers for all concerned. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Richard, they are both lovely and the real beauty behind them is the caring that is behind the pen. No matter if you choose one of these or pen another, as long as you put your heart in it then the poem will touch the lives of those around her. My prayers for sure to this family and for the girl and to you as well. What they have asked you to do is never easy but I can see already that you have given a ray of love in the matter. |
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windwarrior New Member
since 2000-12-22
Posts 7California |
I am truly sorry for this unfortunate situation! I opt for the 2nd of the 2 poems.It just seemd right. They are both nicely done. I wish all concerned the very best,friend.RJ live like there's no tomorrow, RJ |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Thank you all for the comments and prayers. if anyone wants to write a poem for the family I will see it gets to them. Love and light, Richard |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
Richard, I will keep them and you in my prayers! I rather thought the 2nd poem was nice, altho both are lovely. What a sweet thing to do to comfort in this devastation. I pray for a miracle Christmas for your friends and for you....please take care! God bless! Passion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Thank you KOKO Love and light, Richard |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
both were beautiful, my prayers are with them. |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Both poems are perfect...and full of love and beauty... I believe when words come from the heart...they are always beautiful...  God Bless... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Richard...I have a niece who had a stroke before she was even born...her first year it was touch and go constantly... but today she is a beautiful healthy happy child...God does grant prayers and miracles do happen...I will pray for your friend...and hon I like the second poem...both are lovely but that one touched my heart |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
both are very beautiful and heartfelt richard.. ..it is what you put behind the poem, that makes it most special--your heart, your love, your caring....and youve certainly put all that into these poems hugs..to you and them, g "the beginning of wisdom is, 'i do not know'" -unknown |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Thank you all for the responces. A really big thanks for thoes that emailed me poems. I spent the day at the hospital and it is heart breaking to see what I seen. Please contune to keep them in your prayers. Love and light, Richard |
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