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Balladeer
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I thought about bananas where one has to peel the skin
To taste the beauty of the fruit that is contained therein.
I thought about the lobster where one has to crack the shell
To get to that delicious taste that we all know so well.

I thought about the pearl in oysters...diamonds in the coal
All things that need to be undone to reach their real goal
It struck my fancy into smiling knowing that we, too
Have layers of things that cover us to keep our hearts from view.

Reactions to the way life treats us make the layers grow
And clothes us with protective coats so people do not know
The weaknesses that we possess or  our true frailties
Or pain and loss that we've been through that took us to our knees.

We wear a layer of bluster when we're feeling meek inside
A layer of haughty arrogance when we feel loss of pride.
We wear a layer of toughness when our feelings are exposed
A layer of "I don't give a damn" when all our roads are closed.

The layers are quite subtle - sometimes we don't know they're there
We feel a great compassion - others think that we don't care.
We feel a great sincerity while others think that we
Are shallow and unfeeling with no sense of dignity.

Face value paints us one way though we're not that way inside
It can be unintentional or can be used to hide
In either case what people see - if they don't look too far
Is what the layers have made of us - not what we really are.

But sometimes one gets lucky and  someone is found who cares
Someone who will take time enough to look through all the layers
Someone who can see deep enough for all there is to view
Someone who searches hard enough to find the real you.

I treasure someone who came by to look into my soul
Someone who looked for pearls in oysters - diamonds in the coal
Someone who proved beyond a doubt God really answers prayers
By sending her with love enough to look through all the layers.


© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 12-22-2000 05:48 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Balladeer?  This is SUCH a sweet poem, that I almost hate to tell you this--when I saw the title? "layers?" I thought--"ROOSTERS"--OHMIGOD...LOL...(please don't charge me for this session)   Loved the poem and I do understand...giggling into my mountain dew now...(I swear...)
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2 posted 12-22-2000 05:49 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

One of your best, Balladeer.

Truly wonderful.

Corinne
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'Deer
how poetically you express the philosophy that life is lika an onion you peel it off layer by layer...sometimes you cry. And how well you expressed the complexity of human nature and the camoflagues used and misunderstod.


Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon.

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4 posted 12-22-2000 05:55 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Dr. alladeer,
You are an annalist beyond compare.
And a poet of subtle ensnare.
Most of the time I cannot guess
Weather your end is stress or bless.
Marsha
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'Deer, this is indeed a wonderful piece from you, it's quality and style is unbeatable. One of your extra specially wonderful ones love   Yes absolutely fabulous, true quality, top draw, and anything else, oh yes I love it   Excellant work
Take care
                 Mushy
                    


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning


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What an exquisite look into the very nature that makes us "who" we are. You my friend, are that pearl Michael ... the more I read through your words, the more dimensions and facets of life I see you tap. You are a wonderfully gifted writer, who conveys so much to the reader ... I do believe this is now one of my favorites of yours (though they all are).  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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7 posted 12-22-2000 06:23 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

New level for you my friend...extremely well done.  Enjoyed much.

jwesley
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8 posted 12-22-2000 06:27 PM       View Profile for maxtec1   Email maxtec1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit maxtec1's Home Page   View IP for maxtec1

Bravo!!! What a great poem you wrote here. I loved it.
Love and light,
Richard
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*sigh* a very revealing poem. She must be very special to be able to peal your layers and love you all the same. Very well done, Mr Balladeer. We all have many of the same layers. Much love and Christmas hugs to you from me.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com

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10 posted 12-22-2000 06:35 PM       View Profile for Marsha   Email Marsha   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marsha's Home Page   View IP for Marsha

'Deer, I forgot to say that I'd love to borrow some of those layers, I'm as open as a book. And just once I'd like to think that someone doesn't know what I was going to say before I've said it. (Still I expect it's a little too late to learn the art of subtlety)
Love this one I really do
                Mushy
                    


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning




[This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 12-22-2000).]
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Balladeer, my dear friend, this is one for the books dear poet. What a wonderful piece of writing and how true these words ring. May we all be so lucky to find someone who's willing to see beneath the surface to find the true person we really are...oh, what a difference it can make in one's life.
A merry Christmas to you and yours my dear friend  
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Well I must say that not only does it appear that you have scored a treasure of a woman but if she made it through your layers then she most definitely found the gold mine hidden in the mountain.  The very nature of the fact that you can see all this and then pen it lets us all know that you are special indeed and very worthy of the happiness you have sought.  Wonderful write my friend and may your holidays be spent surrounded with love and the sharing of your love as I know it will.  God bless you and Happy Holidays.

A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses.
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Some say that metaphor is the soul of poetry. If that is true, these are immortal words. I personally, believe that the muse is the heart of poetry and gives the soul it's very breath.  

This has heart and soul....it's a fine poem.

"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day,
so I never have to live without you."

Winnie the Pooh


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you be my onion.
i've got your skin!
lean over here,
let the peeling begin!
underneath layers,
i'm sure i will find
something so sweet!
(so, was THIS on your mind?)
  

come to me, baby,
i find you a-peeling!
orange you glad that
i'm on my knees kneeling?
give me a signal,
show me a sign!
i'll peel your layers,
if you will peel mine!
  


a-mused, i'm sure...rofl... hehe...hey, but  truthfully... (would you like me to be truthful? LOL).... this poem has layers and layers of meaning just like the author, and it was a pleasure discovering each and every one of them..... great writing, my 'deer sweet friend who i am truly blessed to have....
i treasure your poetry....
and YOU!  
      


- if you want it, come and get it... for cryin' outloud! - david gray

[This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 12-22-2000).]
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Beautiful words and message! You're a true artist of verse!  Your mind is brilliant, I love every poem you pen and am touched by each one.  Each one is thought provoking, sincere and inspiring, I look forward to your next gem  

Take care,
Melissa


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Would that I were to be blessed
with such sweet calm happiness

'Deer, your love of life...where'er she be
must be smiling most happily...

and I am so very pleased for you...take her, she's yours...

and all of us applaud....and are inspired...


Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



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Reactions to the way life treats us make the layers grow
And clothes us with protective coats so people do not know
The weaknesses that we possess or  our true frailties
Or pain and loss that we've been through that took us to our knees.

We wear a layer of bluster when we're feeling meek inside
A layer of haughty arrogance when we feel loss of pride.
We wear a layer of toughness when our feelings are exposed
A layer of "I don't give a damn" when all our roads are closed.

The layers are quite subtle - sometimes we don't know they're there
We feel a great compassion - others think that we don't care.
We feel a great sincerity while others think that we
Are shallow and unfeeling with no sense of dignity.
===================
But sometimes one gets lucky and  someone is found who cares
Someone who will take time enough to look through all the layers
Someone who can see deep enough for all there is to view
Someone who searches hard enough to find the real you.

I treasure someone who came by to look into my soul
Someone who looked for pearls in oysters - diamonds in the coal
Someone who proved beyond a doubt God really answers prayers
By sending her with love enough to look through all the layers.
================
Michael, this is SOOOOO sincere and so cool and so wisdom filled and just SO YOU that I cant stop smiling after reading it twice...
it is SO awesome to see you inspired like this ...
and the lessons learned and the truth and wisdom this poem teaches is what makes you the adored poet here that you are.
BIG OLE SPAMMY smooches for this one Deer-heart.
later-love ya in love-gator
jm
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Excellent Balladeer! Those layers are hard to penetrate sometimes but like you write here... It's a real love that takes time and patience to look through them and still care.
I don't think many of us tend to see ourselves in a bad light as we keep on moving along the path we have chosen for ourselves.. very provocative writing! I enjoyed the wisdom mixed into this recipe for true love.. take care....ethome
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Hi Balladeer,

  This is wonderful and my pleasure to read. This is a piece of art you've penned. Lovely in every way.  
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20 posted 12-23-2000 12:01 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

serenity..a little cock-a-doodle-do on the brain? ROFL!! Glad I didn't write about Friars!!  

Corinne...Thank you!!  

Kethry...yes, the onion is a perfect example..thank you for the kind words...

Sy...who you calling an annalist?  ..and I haven't had a blessed end in a long time! LOL! Thank you, friend Sy...

Marsha...I'm really glad you like it, Mushy!  

Kit...you make me feel like a pearl with your comments. Thank you!  

jwesley...I appreciate ti very much. Thank you  

maxtec...thank you, Richard!  

Startime...and Christmas hugs to you and your layers, too  

Mushy...don't you dare put on layers. Your openness is a breath of fresh air  

Hoot...I'm so glad you found yours and it's wonderful to see you. Merry Christmas to you, Ruth!!  

Mark...thank you, sir!!!I appreciate your kind words VERY much and I wish you and yours a very happy holiday season!  

Rose...heart and soul covers it all. I'm so glad you liked it!  

Doreen...the egg nog flowing freely tonight, is it? ROFL!! Glad you find it a-peeling       

Melissa...thank you! Your words are very kind! I only hope I can keep your interest  

sunshine ...to inspire you is a reward unto itself....thank you  

Janet Marie..you are SO good to me with your replies! More spammy kisses?? They're really piling up!!  

ethome....you are so right!the layers ARE hard to penetrate and sometimes we don't even know they are there....takes special people indeed to see through them. Thank you for reading!  

kindasorta...I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for stopping by.....


[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 12-23-2000).]
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Came here looking for a peaceful beginning to a hectic day  ahead...your work never disappoints!
Thank you.

Cindi
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22 posted 12-23-2000 12:24 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer~
I've read this over many times -
every time gives me a different feeling of the layers
of exploration in each of us.

Your artistry of thought is deeply
motivational - and quite revealing of your talents.

I was drawn to thinking that if guided tours
of the layers of me were offered -
would someone who took that tour come away satisfied -
or would they want a refund ?

Those in my life who've taken the tour convince me that -
'beyond a doubt God really answers prayers'

When you roll up your sleeves and set about to get us thinking -
you sure do it like no other can.

Happiest of holidays to you, my friend.
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~



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and Marge, I have read it many times also, let's bump it up so those Christmas shoppers who missed it can remove their layers.....it's beautiful.

"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day,
so I never have to live without you."

Winnie the Pooh


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Cindi...thank you SO much! May the peace carry you throughout the day...

Marge...when does the next tour start??? Can I go? I have no doubt that no one was walked away asking for a refund because you are a beautiful lady with a heart as big as Toerag's mouth. Thank you, Marge, for caring  

Rose...thanks for the bump...that felt good!!!  
 
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