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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2000-12-22 05:37 PM


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     The Awe And Aura Of Love

Love, a pollen spore, blown and sown,
Transcending into overtone,
That brakes the bounds of earthly bed
And flowers in your heart and head.

You are enceinte with its girth
Surrounded by a field of birth.
Full bloom and radiant fair.
Enthralled with its being there.

It arrests you in every way,
Like being King of a soiree.
On the constant edge of exalt,
It leads you into full default.

A bouquet of exquisite hold.
A habitual rainbows fold.
A chameleon of colored hues.
A garden of greens and blues.

Its bloom peaks beauty every day,
Dancing an exotic display.
Quixotic as an angels spell,
Euphoric, as a flowers smell.

It is a metamorphosis.
A type of lovers genesis.
You've passaged into Edens goal
The very essence of her soul.

Without the pain of giving birth.
You've reached your heaven here on earth


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Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
1 posted 2000-12-22 05:46 PM


Beautiful words!

Corinne

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
2 posted 2000-12-22 08:58 PM


Nicely written my friend...and thank goodness  I could attain that "heaven on earth" without giving birth. Children are wonderful but I'll happily leave birthing to women, though I do like being there for the occasion.

jwesley

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2000-12-22 09:03 PM


Sy....

you made me smile....


and think....


and know....

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-12-22 10:33 PM


A bouquet of exquisite hold.
A habitual rainbows fold.
A chameleon of colored hues.
A garden of greens and blues.

Its bloom peaks beauty every day,
Dancing an exotic display.
Quixotic as an angels spell,
Euphoric, as a flowers smell.

It is a metamorphosis.
A type of lovers genesis.
You've passaged into Edens goal
The very essence of her soul.

Without the pain of giving birth.
You've reached your heaven here on earth
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me thinks if ya cut yourself.. you would bleed poetry...in rhyme ...with perfect cadence...and with the Aura of a rose garden ...
and OF COUSRE a drop or two of WAY COOL ...
and in case ya cant tell..
this poem makes me giddy...
Loooooove this one ...
later-me winkiewinkie-gator
me

Some people find subtlety in strangers
if you find anything~let me in
Your eyes~you see everything
my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2000-12-22 10:41 PM


Seymour this is so very well written and it took a lot of poetic guts to put in metamorphosis and then try to rhyme to it.. but then I enjoyed the whole idea of the poem 'The Awe And Aura Of Love'

"It's bloom peaks beauty everyday,
Dancing an exotic display.
Quixotic as an angel's spell
Euphoric, as a flower's smell."

Very very nice work indeed......ethome

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
6 posted 2000-12-22 11:14 PM


Corinne,
Thank you sweet.

Jwesley,
Nice comment, thank you.

Sunshine,
Glad I can do these things. *L*

JM,
One rose on ice, winkiewinkie Stinky

Ethome,
Thank you for the very very.

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