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Catatonic Reverie
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Catatonic Reverie |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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A catatonic reverie Suspended in frigid air Bears the etching of your face And shows your smile plastered In whispy threads of moonlight. My frostbitten fingertips Long to trace the fire Living in your limbs, But the only light they touch Is the fragile glow Of the quiet, sleepy stars. Desolate teardrops Freeze to beaded crystals Upon my trembling cheeks... My soul is crippled And my arms barren Without the warmth of you. A spirit languished, Floating in the icy sky Bears the anquish of my thoughts As with a gentle sob I remember you... And then...simply let you go. *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Krista, this is such a touching piece. It brought tears to my eyes, I can relate to it so well. It's so hard to let go, even if it's just a memory. Keep up the beautiful work! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Goodness Alwye, if this is what winter does to you, I need to watch out for spring and summer... this is wonderful! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Oh, sweetheart, this is such a beautiful poem! The lonliness in this is piercing, I especially liked the lines: "My frostbitten fingertips Long to trace the fire Living in your limbs" I loved your sentiments, dear  Abrahm Simons "I'm not sick, but I'm not well, and I'm so hot, cause I'm in Hell." - Harvey Danger |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
Alwye: Finally I've read a poem of yours now. This is really good work. I love the way you described how you felt. I can understand about how things can be hard to let go of also. Take care. ~Lisa~ ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all so very much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
I feel you have been peeking into my heart... This is so heartbreaking...and beautifully expressed... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
ALWYE, this poem is such an enchanting read and I thank you for sharing... coco |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I really like how you have described this type of purposeless excitement yet you make the reader realize what's lying between the lines ...the real heartache still existing but lost to time and circumstances... very good!! |
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