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Balladeer
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0 posted 2000-12-19 04:34 PM



You say you're only ordinary?
Sweetheart, don't you see
The love that pours from out my heart
And what you mean to me?

The pyramids are ordinary!
Pointed piles of stone!
You, my dear, with your sweet face
Could make a pharoah moan!

The Mona Lisa? Ordinary!!!!
Just a bunch of paint!
Some people think it;s beautiful
But, next to you, it ain't!!!

A sunrise is considered pretty
Ordinarily
But can't compare to your glow when
You're lying next to me.

Niagra Falls is just some water
Falling out of view
But isn't close to imitating
How I fell for you!

The Seven Wonders of the World
I do consider great.
If I'm allowed to cast my vote
You will be number eight!

You're beautiful, my sweetheart, and
You brighten all my days.
Your beauty always shines in
Extra-ordinary ways!!!  



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SEA
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Balladeer~  
So very sweet!   -SEA

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2 posted 2000-12-19 04:43 PM


well this poem ain't ordinary, no way, not from a poet with exra ordinary talent.

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

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3 posted 2000-12-19 05:07 PM


or-di-nary, n., [OFr & ML: OFr ordinairie]L, 1(a) an official having jurisdiction within a specificed area by right of the office he or she holds; esp. a bishop having such jurisdiction within his own dioceses;

adj., 1 customary; usual; regular; normal...

Well in one light, I would say that you were ordinary...but only as a noun....

LOL...OK Deer...let her go...she needs to breathe!

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4 posted 2000-12-19 07:20 PM


~*Sigh*~

She is very lucky, and there is nothing ordinary about that!  

Much enjoyed this 'deer!




~Sheri

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left by those who got there first"



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5 posted 2000-12-19 07:30 PM


Bal~
this was just so darn precious and
sweet. i love it when you write like this
my friend! beautiful display of your heart.
lucky gal she is   take care.]
~amy~


~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~


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6 posted 2000-12-19 07:45 PM


'Deer, Very extra-ordinary, I love this one it is truly excellant, and wonderful. really superb poem. (I won't slip into french love, it's just a little to late for my tongue to be doing accents   )
Fabulous work, and she's a very lucky fille.

Take care
                    Mushy
                        
(Sorry I couldn't help it   )


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



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7 posted 2000-12-19 07:49 PM


Evening Balladeer,

You have tapped your very heart for your sweetheart, and it shows in this writing. Well done.

BC


[This message has been edited by Bill Charles (edited 12-19-2000).]

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8 posted 2000-12-19 07:50 PM


Mr. 'Deer....
This was so wonderful to read. It's always nice to hear a man express his feelings, and you really are a master of that!!  No wonder you are a 'balladeer'!!  


Write on!
-<--<--{(@


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9 posted 2000-12-19 07:58 PM


extraordinary....with smiles, hugs, and winks!!!
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10 posted 2000-12-19 07:58 PM


The pyramids are ordinary!
Pointed piles of stone!
You, my dear, with your sweet face
Could make a pharoah moan!

The Mona Lisa? Ordinary!!!!
Just a bunch of paint!
Some people think it;s beautiful
But, next to you, it ain't!!!
=================
your so clever and cute...
what a way to smoooooze her and make her swoon.
this ones so sweet its drawing honey bees  

BUT ya know what I noticed?????
you failed to compare her to Spam!!!!   LOL
OH WELL ... its still swell  
later-comparison shopper-gator
jm

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11 posted 2000-12-19 08:07 PM


'Deer
aww that's so sweet,
You know you can get pills to help manage this adolescent crisis you're going through  

Kethry


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12 posted 2000-12-19 08:38 PM


I'm just smiling here at how you got a 5 syllable word like "ordinarily" to stand on it's own in a line and flow so perfectly with the rhythm ... but you did! What a wonderfully spirited poem. Loved this Michael!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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13 posted 2000-12-19 09:29 PM


Shucks Bal, I'm all embarrassed now....*g*

Seriously, it's loving, kind and humorous, just what I expect from a clown...

HUSG

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14 posted 2000-12-19 09:42 PM


such variety in your writing Balladeer ..another one to enjoy

~Wynter


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...Pope John Paul II



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15 posted 2000-12-19 10:19 PM





lovely deery...enjoyed

          ~Victoria~

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16 posted 2000-12-19 10:28 PM


My husband has been dishing out that kind of bull to me for over 30 years and I love it. I know your special friend loves it to.
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17 posted 2000-12-19 10:42 PM


Sounds like a perfect romance to me..
Work those love poems...

Sandra

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18 posted 2000-12-20 01:39 AM


You have a way of making us all feel special...with every word you write...
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19 posted 2000-12-20 01:56 AM


and I thouhgt it would be just another ordinary poem from you bal... but you had to go and make it extra.  

next you'll be writing simple poems... that ain't, and ugly poems that are great.
and stupid poems that are smart
and stinky poems that are sweet

oh, well a lousy poet you arn't.

Parker

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20 posted 2000-12-20 02:54 AM


Okay so now you are going to set the standards of flatery so high for the ladies that us "ORDINARY" men can't meet them and then you shall have them all to yourself.  Is that the plan my friend?  

Wonderfully exquisite piece my friend.  So tell us, how did this wonder of the world happen into your life?   She is doing wonders for your pen lately and just from that alone I can see that she truely must be the eigth wonder of the world.

A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses.
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21 posted 2000-12-20 02:59 AM


How beautiful. You definitely know how to make a heart melt! That was incredibly sweet. Fantastic read!  


--Cassandra

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22 posted 2000-12-20 07:08 AM


What a lovely poem!!!!!!!

"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day,
so I never have to live without you."

Winnie the Pooh



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23 posted 2000-12-20 07:48 AM


You are a rascal and a scalawag.  Now give us men some room!  lol - Neat theme.  I really enjoyed the tightness of the stanzas.
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24 posted 2000-12-20 10:04 AM


Whew!



my ordinary response would be "thanks for the poem" but this one can't be for me because there's nothin' ordinary on this side of the screen... LOL.... soooo i'm really VERY  relieved.. i thought you mighta fallen in love with me or something... geesh...  
not that you're not a great guy and everything... y'know?... but this dor's been locked for so long, letting someone as special as you in could possibly cause a major shift in the foundation of the whole durn house and i'm not sure it would be a good idea, babe  

anyway, cute poem, sweet Michael
and even though it's not for me,
i still love you!
*wink*  

(just ring the bell, ok?)

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25 posted 2000-12-20 11:07 AM


lucky the woman to whom you dedicate this to....


and lucky me for reading this

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26 posted 2000-12-20 02:31 PM


SEA...thank you for the sweet, my sweet  

brian...I thank you. Great to see you!  

sunshine...take me as a noun...unless you're open to a preposition  

Irie...thank you for the sigh!!! I LOVE sighs!  

Amy...you are so kind!!! Thank you!  

Marsha...you slip into French love any time you want! You are always so nice...thank you!

Bill...I thank you for the read and your thoughtfulness...

sunny1..thank you! Isn't it funny how it's so much easier on paper than in spoken form? Your comments are VERY appreciated...

serenity...smiles, hugs and winks....all from you? My cup runneth over!!!  

janet Marie...compare her to spam? Now you backed me against the wall...NOTHING compares to spam!! (unless it's a woman with spammy kisses   )

Kethry...ROFL!!! Are my zits showing?  

Kit..only YOU would point that out and recognize it! THANK YOU!!!!  

Rainbow...you KNOW how I feel about being your clown....I LOVE IT!!!  

Wynter...well, it IS the spice of life! Thank you for enjoying...

Victoria...thank you for the flowers! They are beautiful..and so are your thoughts  

inot2B...BULL! you call my heartfelt words BULL?! You ARE always observant!   Yes, allow him the pleasure of continuing.I'm sure you deserve every word of them  

catalinamoon..I wish...but nothing is ever perfect. We just try and hope for the best. Thank you...

Paula...I thank you....and you ARE!  

Parker...as long as I don't get those orders reversed! Thank you for the clever and appreciated response...all I REALLY wanna do is write cowboy poetry...but that's your dep't  

Mark...no standards could be set so high that YOU couldn't meet them! You kidding? Wonders of the world don't happen,,,they just are. If we get lucky enough, we can stand in the presence of one at times...

Cassandra...thank you for melting  

Rose...simple words with much feeling..thank you!  

LGA...thank you!  I heard you like tight things!  

Doreen...you got that right! Ain't nothing ordinary there and far be it from me to shake foundations! I'll be glad to ring your bell...you have done that for me many times  

kaile...and lucky for me to have someone like you to appreciate it! Thank you VERY much  

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27 posted 2000-12-20 08:34 PM


Well, there's nothing ordinary about you either! Great poem!

Denise

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28 posted 2000-12-20 08:43 PM


I really like this, i only wish someone would truly feel that way about me     can I borrow someone's tissues please  

great poem

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29 posted 2000-12-20 08:53 PM


This is wonderful, Deer.  You write an awesome love letter!

Corinne

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30 posted 2000-12-20 09:23 PM


Balladeer~



Did you really mean it ?
WOW ! That's SOME tribute !
~*Marge*~


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31 posted 2000-12-20 09:26 PM


Geesh...no wonder these pieces take so long to load...especially when you've been SPAMMED!

Marge, I'm ROTFLMAO!


Karilea
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32 posted 2000-12-20 09:32 PM


Marge-- ROFL!!! so good it's gone!!! i can't stop laughing..... ARGHHHHHHHHHH

BRILLIANT, 'Deer friend  

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33 posted 2000-12-20 09:33 PM


Marge, you are a WILD WOMAN!!! Ya see how that Spam fits right in with those other wonders and even dwarfs them????

THANK YOU, Marge, for giving it the recognition it deserves. That's why it's best served on Wonder bread!!  

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34 posted 2000-12-20 09:38 PM


No-one  could ever feel ordinary again, after having such a poem written for them.
Beautiful  
Merry Christmas
Isis

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35 posted 2000-12-20 09:44 PM


I forgot to put this in my library, and darn, now I want a spam sandwich......Treet...with mustard on rye...please , oh please!!!!!!!!!

"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day,
so I never have to live without you."

Winnie the Pooh



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36 posted 2000-12-20 10:12 PM


What a lucky woman!!!!!!
Very beautifully written.

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37 posted 2000-12-31 05:46 PM


I truly enjoyed this piece ball.......nice one here.......lucky gal..



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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38 posted 2000-12-31 07:53 PM


A good poet brought this up to the top again...so I read it again, why not?

'Deer, you have SUCH a way with you...

be well my friend, and HNY...

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