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snowpants
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0 posted 2000-12-17 07:32 PM


When life has lost its sense of logic,
I lift my face to the sky
And indulge in the downpour.
When not an answer remains
With which my heart can be satisfied,
I drift away to this world
Where it all comes together.
I can only endure so much;
After a while,
My heart pulls away.
Your tender kiss is no longer inviting;
I don’t mind writing this sad poetry.
Perhaps it’s finally arrived--
Maybe, just maybe,
My world has stopped revolving around you.
The thunder roars in December,
So stranger things have happened.
The ink that flows through this pen
Is that of dignity;
The soul that appears on this page
Is of the character of independence.
This mood’s visits are infrequent,
So forgive me, Love,
If I jump at the chance.


I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

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SEA
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1 posted 2000-12-17 07:46 PM


SP~

"This mood’s visits are infrequent,
So forgive me, Love,
If I jump at the chance."

This is perfect!   -SEA

passing shadows
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2 posted 2000-12-17 09:43 PM


SNOWPANTS! This...THIS is exactly what I feel sometimes!!! And how well you've said it!!! I love it!
Aimster
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3 posted 2000-12-17 09:55 PM


Kris~
YOU GO GIRL! This is what I'm talking
about...excellent poem penned full of
your honest emotions. strong poignant
piece that says a lot! so jump darlin'.
i'd say you deserve some happiness.

take care my friend!
~~~~~~~~~

maxtec1
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4 posted 2000-12-17 10:07 PM


very good writing. Its good to find ones self every once in a while but never forget about the people who needs you to be a part of their lives too.
I enjoyed the read,
Love and light,
Richard

Lady Lightning
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5 posted 2000-12-17 10:10 PM


You said this so perfectly..I can relate absolutely and completely with this one snowpants.. You are so ready for that "jump"...   ~LL~

The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown

Charisma
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6 posted 2000-12-18 02:50 AM


SP: powerful words, and I feel the same way sometimes, you have expressed your feelings very well

((warm hugs))
Charisma

Mark Bohannan
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7 posted 2000-12-18 05:49 AM


Jump all you want my friend and if I am lucky then maybe I can catch you instead of that other guy.LOL  Sorry, dreaming again.  Very lovely poem my friend and I too loved the ending as you could tell.  
snowpants
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8 posted 2000-12-18 06:01 PM


SEA:  perfect??  well, thank you!  I am flattered!  

ps:  well, I am glad to see that we think alike!  thanks!!  

Aims:  hey girlie!  it was one of those moods I just had to take advantage of.  thanks, as always, m'friend!  -e  ~~~~

Richard:  thanks!  and, yes, you have been giving me much to think about lately!  

LL:  oh, more ready than you know!!  I am glad you liked this!!  

Charisma:  thanks!  and, I'm sure we all feel this way at one point or another.  it just takes a little more strength to actually do it!  glad you liked it!!  

Mark:  dreaming??  why would you have to be dreaming?  I'd be the lucky one to have you catch me!  LOL  Thank you, my friend...I'm glad you liked this!!     

sp


I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

kindasorta
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9 posted 2000-12-18 06:06 PM


LOL....love it!!

or

THANK GOD AND GREYHOUND HE'S GONE!!!

jwesley
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10 posted 2000-12-18 06:09 PM


Sea stole my comment!!  Very well written, SP, truly enjoyed.

jwesley

snowpants
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11 posted 2000-12-18 08:12 PM


kindasorta:  you are pretty funny!  thanks for reading!  

jwesley:  thank you!  I'm glad you enjoyed!!  

sp


I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

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