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Almost Heaven |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A peach of streak across the sky, caressed, a bless, cornflower blue, liquid lava light surprise as yellow steals the night away yearning,turning, satin sway, tears of teal, to slap my eyes... and no, I'm not the least surprised, that you would look the other way... (repost from Corner Pub) |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
WOW does this ever speak volumes. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for the post. Love and light. Richard |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
*eager grins* Me liked this one bunches! Let me tell ya why! First of all, when you described your colors, you didn't just state your colors, you painted them in the most awesome words imagineable! Second of all, your internal rhyming and alliteration were fantastic! Third of all, the personification of "yellow" sunrise was very good! Fourth of all, you incorporated a very profound conclusion into what I thought was going to be "just" a great imagery poem! And finally, anything that I might have missed for some splendiferous reason was exceptional, to say the least, I'm sure! *grins* Love ya, me "Satan is my motor." - Cake |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
beautiful poetry. A pleasure to experience. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Serenity.... You've taken a blank canvas and splashed it with your hues, thoughts and words, and painted a picture I can understand. Fabulous work you've framed!  ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
a colorful conclusion. Could it be scarlet? Well done! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Well now, I'm thinking that you've splashed the softest array of colors across the canvas. Here's hoping the 'tears of teal' are dried. Sending *Hugs* your way. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Your words have such an incredible voice to them K. The way you describe things fascinates me. This is such a cool poem, sadly,...it aches. Thanks You. *Peace. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
liquid lava light surprise as yellow steals the night away yearning,turning, satin sway, tears of teal, to slap my eyes... and no, I'm not the least surprised, that you would look the other way... ============= *sigh* lookie what I just found... a serenity jewel to put in my treasure box ... my oh my its a beauty too ... like the poet who wrote ... rainbows baby...ya wrote a rainbow  *kisskiss* me |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
enjoyed serenity......enjoyed. Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I think I remember this poem and it still packs the same powerful punch it did first time round. excellent poem. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wahooo Lady, way to go! This is terrific !, the way the ending just comes down like a bolt of lightning, Great Work hon I love it! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this wouldn't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
yes indeed.....almost heaven you have a colorful spirit. love it..... Charisma |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Serenity--Wonderful poem. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
serenity, Loved the imagery here. Brilliant colors. I detect a hint of sadness in this. The ending is very powerful my friend. Nice writing. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I wanted to pop in to thank you all---every reply feels like a little "love pat"--it does mean so much to me. I humbly give thanks, with gratitude. Hugs to forum. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ Awesome write!! -SEA |
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