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John R
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Toledo OH

0 posted 2000-12-16 08:46 PM


        Dream Lost

O Eye of night see my fate
Look down with saddened gaze
Wait not for me who is late
Wake me not from this haze

Dream lost in autumn's mist
Give way to slumberous night
Summer's plight reminisced
Winter's dawning comes twilight

O Eye of night look my way
Do not this my plight forsake
Give me hope in dream's soothsay
Still my rest and sorrow take

Dream lost in forever bliss
I Escape not from my fate
Lost now in despair's abyss
Love's sweet kiss do I await



If a dream touches us,
it exists to us as anything
else that touches us.

© Copyright 2000 John Romstadt - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 2000-12-16 09:05 PM


I SEE... I SEE... why you liked my work... We've got a love for proper syntax in common..

I look forward to reading lots more of your fine postings... Nicely done, John..

John R
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since 2000-12-14
Posts 141
Toledo OH
2 posted 2000-12-17 12:04 PM


I find myself writing quite often in an archaic voice.  Must be a prvious life trying to come out.  Thanks Nan!

If a dream touches us,
it exists to us as anything
else that touches us.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-12-17 12:36 PM


Dream lost in autumn's mist
Give way to slumberous night
Summer's plight reminisced
Winter's dawning comes twilight

O Eye of night look my way
Do not this my plight forsake
Give me hope in dream's soothsay
Still my rest and sorrow take

Dream lost in forever bliss
I Escape not from my fate
Lost now in despair's abyss
Love's sweet kiss do I await
=============
excellent writing...
your rhyme flow and cadence are perfect
made for a great read aloud ...
well chosen vocabulary as well
bittersweet emotive poetry
very well done, impressive work
take care
jm

Some people find subtlety in strangers
if you find anything~let me in
Your eyes~you see everything
my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2000-12-17 02:44 AM


I have to agree with the others this is a real tight well balanced write with great words well arranged ... I enjoy this old style standard...very well done!!
Cassandra
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since 2000-12-16
Posts 48
Charlotte, North Carolina, USA
5 posted 2000-12-17 03:09 AM


Splendid! I'm enjoying reading your work.. you are a very terrific writer. There seems to be a great amount of love in your heart. Thank you for sharing it!

--Cassandra

Charisma
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6 posted 2000-12-17 09:00 AM


love this wonderful piece.....enjoyed reading it.

Charisma

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