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Cassandra
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0 posted 2000-12-16 05:19 PM



I really don't know if I should even share my first poem as I know its probably horrid. As I said my love, Crag, inspired me to write this. I have to share it with someone and I can't share it with him.. I don't have the courage. The only thing I could think of was to put it here. Ugh, sorry  


How I long to be with you.

Like a powerful and demanding storm choosing its own path...
I choose you.
A child screaming for candy..
my heart and soul scream for you.
It's pure and fresh..
a cool wet spring in the simmering dry summer heat.

I was once like a fallen dead leaf.
Tired, drained, and lost among the wind.
Carelessly I floated around no particular course in mind.

You stumbled upon me entering my life..
bringing a smile to my face like the crash of lightning brings light to a dark stormy night sky.

You transformed me seemingly overnight.

Joy filled my heart as mountains fill the sky...
Dreams of you at night..
My arms reaching out to you..
a young flower reaching for the bright morning sun.

My life has no begun.

Whirling winds...
My mind swirls..
The confusion of it all...
Why can't I be near you? Why?
Thousands of miles between us..
I've never felt closer...

I see the world in a new light..
like a blind man who can see..
you've awakened me...


No words can fully describe what my heart seeks to tell you...
I long to touch you.. to show you how wondeful you truly are.
A brush of lips, my heart leaps..

Only in my dreams can this be true...

Until we meet, my precious, know forever that I love you...

Like time... never-ending.


© Copyright 2000 Cassandra - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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Cassandra~ Welcome!   This is wonderful.....you should share it with him....it will make his day.......so sweet!   I hope to see more poems from you   -SEA
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2 posted 2000-12-16 05:27 PM


*sigh* This is beautiful and should be shared with the one who inspired it. They will love it and be very touched. Much love to you from me.
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John R
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3 posted 2000-12-16 05:32 PM


I see why my poem touched you. Yours touches me the same way.  However one should never fear love and expressing yourself to the one you love should never be feared.  Open your words to him and let him inside.
Nan
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4 posted 2000-12-16 05:41 PM


...and thank you for sharing...

This is lovely, Cassandra - I'd also like now to officially welcome you to Passions in Poetry... Check your email for a special greeting..

Marsha
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5 posted 2000-12-16 05:47 PM


Cassandra, I did say welcome, and why are you sorry, this is a really fine piece. Absolutely excellant, share it with your boyfriend, he will be so flattered. I know you will love it here, and we will love having you here. (I knew you would post love, and it's wonderful!)
Take care
                Marsha
                    


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



Charisma
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6 posted 2000-12-16 06:32 PM


wonderful penned, and you must share this lovely poem with your inspiration.....
welcome....and hope to see more from you.

Charisma


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7 posted 2000-12-16 06:37 PM


This is truly a beautifully penned piece,
welcome to Passions and thank you for
sharing the words from your heart.  *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. ~me~


Cassandra
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Charlotte, North Carolina, USA
8 posted 2000-12-17 03:21 AM


Thank you all so very much for your kind words. Maybe after a little time I can gather to the courage to share this with him. I'm a rather timid person when it comes to things like this. Which is why it amazes me that I was able to open up and share with you guys. Thank you very much for allowing me to share this with you, and for accepting it and me.       *hugs*

--Cass

athena4
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9 posted 2000-12-17 10:12 AM


Welcome, Cassandra,
     And your first offering could not have been more beautiful and heartfelt. Will be looking forward to seeing more. And best of luck with your honey!!
        Much love,  Elise

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