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Souls Like Crystal Snowflakes [revised, repost Jan. 2000]
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Sunshine
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 Souls Like Crystal Snowflakes Not so very long ago during a midnight it chanced to snow and early, around 3:00 a.m. or so, I awoke to a glistening glow. There was no sound, no apparent life, but only in a fairy tale-like dream, could I imagine souls like crystal snowflakes come upon my scene. For there was a sparkle all around as the skies had cleared and the moon abound came forth, over the land covered white, my crystal snowflake souls and I, alone in the night. For each flake was an individual spirit before it joined its companions white and like my world, they all joined in unity, to make things appear so right. So may souls like crystal snowflakes abound round you this year; and keep in mind during summer; that in rainbows they will appear. ©KRJ 11 January 2000 |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Beautiful portrayal of the winter snow...and the graphic goes so well with the poem. |
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Sunshine
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Thank you Elizabeth...I was fortunate to find this one that matched my thoughts...to catch a snowflake in flight and imagine a soul floating... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, this is so beautiful, it really is, Oh this is so calm and wonderful. Each of those snowflakes drifting down and then laying a blanket over the earth. Just like the angels coming to sigh as they watch you write. I'm sure they lean a little closer to you, peeping over your shoulder so they can spread your wonderful words to those who haven't got a day off. Utterly brilliant work from you love, it really is. Take care Majestic Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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Ah Marsha, just a little something from the archives, now revisited with graphics...so very glad I gave you something for your "break"...thank you my friend... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Mmmmmm - I like this - who'd imagine crystal snowflakes giving one a warm glow? |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Karilea~ An absolutely beautiful and unique approach to personifying snowflakes! I love the theme and the title, heck I love every line! You should be very proud with your poem and your talent. Please submit this poem for the next passions book!  ~Melissa~ The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Sunshine
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Mr. Yeats, thank you...it IS amazing how cold moments can elicit warm thoughts, yes... Melissa, how kind of you! I will keep your comment in mind when Book II comes around, thank you! Long time no see, welcome home! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
have you been looking out my window Sunshine?? This is just what it looks like. . . but without the wonderful words. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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The soulflakes are floating around here, too Sven...and are quite welcome...thank you for reading... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
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For there was a sparkle all around as the skies had cleared and the moon abound came forth, over the land covered white, my crystal snowflake souls and I, alone in the night. my kind of poem sunshine ha i like this alot..and the eerie pic too.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great work with the beautiful snow and the graphics there sweet Sunshine...I really like this...especially where I'm from.....ethome |
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Sunshine
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Victoria, I had you in mind when I reposted this...so thank you for picking up on the ESP and coming in to read... Ethome, only those who continue to live in the chill grip of winter can love it...and like you, I find the silver lining to any situation...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ B r r r r r ! Spirits at rest under a blanket of snow. Thank goodness your words added much warmth ! Warm *hugs*. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
hey Kari, i really love this yuh. I saw the title and jumped cuz i remember Dream Evil challenging me with this one. here was my effort back in open 5 Souls Like Crystal Snowflakes Fall, souls, like crystal snowflakes Each unique yet very well Blanket the earth alone alike From great length just who can tell She fell to the earth one day To me she was fair and clean Not like the dirty snowflakes Throughout the field were seen She was so fair yet so divine Gently I touched her in my hand And I could see inside her soul To the beauty that shared the land Holding her close the wind it ebbed Every facet of her was clear Melting between my fingers lost Shed by God, He keeps her near |
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John R Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 141Toledo OH |
I loved the last stanza a fitting ending to a beautiful poem. |
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Sunshine
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Marge, I constantly have cold feet, but always a warm heart...thank you.. Walt, exactly! This was my response to his challenge as well...so why don't you repost yours...it was a terrific piece and a challenge well met... John R...thank you for pointing out what you like...and for coming in to read... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
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For there was a sparkle all around as the skies had cleared and the moon abound came forth, over the land covered white, my crystal snowflake souls and I, alone in the night ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sunshine, I truly enjoyed the entire poem and the above quote which I highlight for you brought back a memory when I lived back east how I would sit in the yard upon the first snowfall and just touch each flake as it gently came down as my eyes were fixated at the stars... Hmm... were you there watching me Honestly sweetie, this one you write is dear to me, hence a keepsake from your heartNpen to my library... |
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