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Running on Empty
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Running on Empty |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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(Trying to jump start my muse with this already traveled poem) Running on Empty Along the parched road of living there was a sign that read, cool mountain stream, first right at the crossroads then across the bridge. I had to get out of my reverie and walk up close to read in small print, enter at your own risk. Well, I was torched as you can imagine, my engine had been running hot and I could smell the stench of my own insatiable thirst. I looked at my gas meter and it read, running on empty watch what you do another dry mile and you are through. I knew how to fix that you see, my reverie was not all I had, I had a reserve tank of dreaming, and I had dreamed my way into many a place. I shifted out of reverie and into dream and turned right at the crossroads, and came across some assumptions, (standing with their hands on hips in the middle of the road, they were,) so I closed my eyes and smooth as silk my dream took me over their stern mouths and landed me in a meadow, lupine dotted and poppy spilled. I could hear the sound of happiness frolicking in the splash of passion and I slowed to take a breath and that was when I saw my future falling before me, and turned away. I gathered my now around me and fastened it with the exhale of my intake and suddenly I was looking out the window at the middle of the day. |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very well done, Martie... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I swear - you'll NEVER be "empty" - and I thank God for that fact - every day!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ On a deserted highway no place I'd ever been before ran into a little muse with her thumb in the air she was hitching and naturally *-*ing (you fill in the blanks) commiserating the fact that she had empty tanks "Just give me a lift to a fueling station Martie's waiting for my inspiration." I said, "Hop in." "Anything for a friend." Now with foot pressed to the floorboard she took off and left me mesmerized ! Toot ! Toot ! Look out in the driveway, I think she has arrived ! *Ya' just got me grinning, gal ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
I liked this poem very much. i could relate to many of the words. great job. Love and life, Richard |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Martie, wonderful positive read. There is never enough creative positive reenforcement in life.... love this message. Parker |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Whenever you're running a little empty... just look for some solar energy!...LOL... always great!  Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
this is REALLY fun Martie, and dead clever as well..... this bit particulary made me smile: "and came across some assumptions, (standing with their hands on hips in the middle of the road, they were,) so I closed my eyes and smooth as silk my dream took me over their stern mouths" I can JUST imagine "assumptions" doing that..heh heh ..i mean how DARE they get in the way of the "reality" of a dream ...lol yes, i like it, and the clever interplay kept my attention right through  P HEY YAY ...I got to one BEFORE Janet Marie....~grin~  [This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 12-16-2000).] |
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Wicked Witch of the East Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 69 |
I'd loan ya my jumper cables, But I sold em, and now they're Mables. And you write about misplacing your Muse...hehe wonderful poem Martie, my poetic flower child. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I ditto everything that schmuck above just said, exceptin' I don't know no Mables... enjoyed your poem Martie. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I looked at my gas meter and it read, running on empty watch what you do another dry mile and you are through. I knew how to fix that you see, my reverie was not all I had, I had a reserve tank of dreaming, and I had dreamed my way into many a place. =============== well all I know is I got running on empty down to an exact science... can go for days on fumes ... and as for these moody damn muses of ours.. ya know what...they need either some tough love or some raspberry tea when ever they come dragging in (losing my sense of humor and patience) can ya tell  and LOL at Poetree ...damn I must be losing my touch  but his comment made me laugh,and thats no small feat today... very cool poem Martie ... you know how I love looking at that magic window of yours ... I hope our muses are having a darn good time and getting well rested.. cuz I intend to work mines moody behind off when she deems to blow back in later lady love ya me Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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John R Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 141Toledo OH |
I have been running a little on empty myself. My muse you see, has taken another road and I was left with an empty heart. Enjoyed this. If a dream touches us, it exists to us as anything else that touches us. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Martie, I like it, Well done as usual my dear, although I can't see you running on empty Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this wouldn't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful Martie! I enjoyed the trip so much I went right with you on that dream wave and well I have to agree with you that was the time to pull out and start over again.... take care....ethome |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Elizabeth--Thank you so much for stopping by. Bill--Me too...and thanks Marge--You are adorable! Richard--Always glad when someone can relate to one of my poem...that's what it's all about! Hi Parker--So glad to see you...thanks for your wonderful reply! Karilea--We have plenty of that here today...supposed to be 80 degrees Philip--I love to make you smile...thanks for your always great replies, my friend. Wicked Witch--I think I saw Mabel down at the diner...at least you didn't loose your marbles. Mike--so glad you stopped by...I kind of like the schumck. Janet--be gentle...you don't want to hurt her...she's sensitive, you know. John--An empty heart..hmmn...no gas station can fill that up...so sorry. Hi Maree...thanks for being so sweet. ethome--glad you came along...wanta go for another ride? |
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