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kaile
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0 posted 2000-12-15 01:01 PM


unfortunately,
misfortune descended

caught unawares,
just like the shocked farmer
witnessing a sky of locusts
sweeping across his field,
he
spiralled into his
inner web of bleak blackness

he suddenly had an inkling
why friends drift apart,

for he certainly didnt want to
meet up and face all their awkward questions,
caring saints they might be

he just felt like
curling himself into a tight tight ball
and roll himself to banished Siberia,

severing ties with all


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2000-12-15 01:46 PM


I have been there on the edge of despair, a most singularly unique time, and welcomed the opportunity to know it, and better still the hand that was put forth through force unseen and led me from it...

yes, I know this time...

well done Kaile...


Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Dennis L. White
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2 posted 2000-12-15 02:19 PM


Kaile,
  Despair and isolation, a pair of theives that often rob us of any chance of joy and peace. This dark poem makes me feel guilty for how bountifully I have been blest. I hope the farmer can see in his mind and heart the bountiful harvest that are yet to come!
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has passed
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)


brian madden
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3 posted 2000-12-16 03:13 PM


an interesting story well weaved metaphor,
I really enjoyed the poem.

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

Lone Wolf
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4 posted 2000-12-16 08:16 PM


kaile,

Somewhere in the darkness looms a ray of light.  I hope you find it.  Those friends with the awkward questions mean well in their hearts.  You may be surprised how many are there when you come out of that ball.   Well done.

LW  


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Mon Cherie
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5 posted 2001-12-06 02:41 AM


I have an idea what you mean, and I hope it's not you who're feeling so pressured by your friends

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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