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Snow Angel Sonnet |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Snow Angel Sonnet The wind is here; the snow has come, cold heart, And I, a shadow in this drifting life; You were my inner crystal full and part, Tonight, I walk alone without your light. The snow has covered all that I once knew, But cold is not enough to numb this pain; I walk this lonely path in search of you, Although your life has gone and left this plane; The star's at least will be my guides tonight, Where ever they may lead I know not why? Away from that same spot you lost your life; Please take me to a place where I won't cry! I 'll lay and make snow angels like before, Oh dear, theirs yours a kiss from heavens door. James Parker Haley Dec 14, 2000 [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 12-15-2000).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh gosh, your pain is so very real and personal. Dear one, how I wish you could see the romance and beauty in the snow without memories so painful that you must feel. The sparkle and guidance of the stars will light your way. I pray love brings stars back into your heart and eyes for snow angels still wait to feel your touch. Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Startime, thank you for the sweet and caring words.... It snowed alot last night and this is just my interpretation of a Snow Angel visiting a lost heart.. Fortunently I am not in this situation. Thank you for the kind reply...  Parker |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Hey Handsome~ you jerked the tears up and out then a sigh of relief knowing this isn't personal.......you just like toying with my emotions don't you?!  -SEA |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This truly touched my heart more than you can imagine. What beauty in your writing of the snow Exquisite Liz |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The snow has covered all that I once knew, But cold is not enough to numb this pain; I walk this lonely path in search of you, Although your life has gone and left this plane; The star's at least will be my guides tonight, Where ever they may lead I know not why? Away from that same spot you lost your life; ================ ahhh p-man ..melting snow and hearts with yet another tear-taking sonnet of yours this ones' beauty lies in its frozen tears emote "You were my inner crystal full and part," so poeticly pretty ... so romantic ... me thinks ya need to do a sonnet for every season  (hey I'm full of good ideas)  LOLexcellent p-man, once again me< !signature--> Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 12-14-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Parker, hauntingly beautiful...and words escape me... this is your heart talking...I know it... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
SEA, sweet poet I do what I can. Liz, if this has touched you dear poet then I would like to dedicate it to you. Janet, thank you maybe I will try. Sunshine, thank you… but all my poetry is from my heart. Parker. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Parker...you touch deep with this one...beautiful sir simply beautiful |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
parker..you gracefully capture the ache in losing one you love so dear.... i'm glad this is only poetic..and not personal.. absolutely wonderful writing love..so many lines i'd have to copy and paste if i were to pick the most wonderful ones...! hugs, gale "people who need people are the luckiest people..." barbra s. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Parker* This is so haunting and beautiful...Parker style poetry at 4 a.m. tell me what could be better Excellent writing~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love these sonnets that you write Parker and this one is no different. I always seem to read a healthy sense of your roots and influences in them. When you write this style it seems to me to translate to an audible and tangible sense of you...you know.... an east coast yarn spinner but with poetic beauty included..... this is great writing my friend!! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Paula, thank you dear. dg, thank you sweets. Butterflies, thank you very much. ethome, thank good friend... never thought of myself as an east coast yarn spinner. I like the sound of it. Parker |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Okay my friend...I conceed!!!!!!!!! Everytime I try a sonnet I compare them to yours but they don't measure up at all. One of these days I am going to say the heck with it and post one anyway. I guess I can't expect to be as good as you anyway, but rest assured that I am going to keep trying. Beautiful write my friend and I am counting it as one of my gifts this year. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
I heard it mentioned if I ever had the chance to read a sonnet penned by Parker, to make SURE I didn't let it get by me...So glad I listened..This is absolutely beautiful... ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Mark, your a great poet, as they say just do it. Thanks for the reply. LL, why thank you, and kiss the person that said that for me... well if its a she, let me do it. .Parker |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is sweet perfection Parker! What a beautiful and touching read ... you've brought such incredible emotion into this lovely Sonnet. My, you do these well ... I loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Beautiful piece! What a lovely read. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Kit, thank you very much for your kind reply. insect, thanks pal. Parker |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nicely crafted, my friend... with a great theme... and very clever extended metaphor... I'm a sucker for a good sonnet any day... Thanks for the good read.. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Breathtakingly beautiul.......I hope that is a word...if not then I just invented it.... Jenn E |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Parker~ sad yet so beautiful...great writings ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
your pain shines through your words, and touched my heart .... wonderful written parker take care ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Nan, thank you... although i'm not sure what an extended metaphor is. Maybe you can explain how I did it. Jenn E, thank you and looks like a good word to me. tracie, thanks you very much. Charisma, thank you, as I said before this is not about me. Parker |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Although your life has gone and left this plane; The star's at least will be my guides tonight, I love these lines. This is a very hauntingly beautiful piece. Your Sonnet's are always so well done. Ehm....your were wearing clothes while making snow angels right?? Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, thanks very much... er.. clothes what clothes. James |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Snowflake twin see how she spins, spins a sugary tale but like love, is frail she melts upon your tongue snowflake the arctic one, the heat is lost on her the heat is lost on her. Cor |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, very nice reply... I kinda got stuck on the line she melts on your tongue..  Park |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I would like to say what a great piece of writing....it's very beautiful and sad too.....I just love it! Nathan |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, Parker! Denise |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Nate and denise, thank you very much. Parker |
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