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lucky
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0 posted 2000-12-13 11:51 AM


along
'bout yesterday
or so... I was sitting out
on the jetty lookin' out to sea in
the black of my mind I played again
an ‘ol misery the horizon stood with
clouds looking cruel I recalled
brother Greg telling me
when a mist rose
off the sea a
storm was
headin' for the
breaker with all it’s
fractured rules memory

recalled it strategy like standin’ on
the back porch waiting for the stroke
of lightning fueling thoughts to call ya
but the phone lines dead I felt again
the rolling stillness and how alone
I thought about losing myself
but I was just to grown
for feelin' I let the
twilight dawn
set another
tone there’s
really no reason
to be calling none and
without hesitating anticipating
some salutation but you began to fade
the shoreline from where we sat I sat alone
with my thoughts on still waters jaded
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Writing isn't just something I do, it's something I am.
To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my delight.
-Marge Tindal


[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 12-13-2000).]

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Martie
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1 posted 2000-12-13 01:48 PM


Dale--Don't let those old miseries tell you stories about yourself ...because I happen to know that the jetty is the best place to feel magnificent...Hugs!
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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2 posted 2000-12-13 06:12 PM


Oh, Dale, I think this is the most beautiful poem you have written yet, about your youngest brother Greg.  Those empty, beautiful Mukilteo shores looking out to the San Juan Islands were your favorite places to go before he died.

I'm especially moved by the words "black of my mind", "waiting for the stroke of lightning" and "phone lines dead".

I know how you miss him, and your mother too.  These last few have been such hard years for you!  All my love, Rosemary

.


The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G.



brian madden
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ireland
3 posted 2000-12-14 04:20 PM


THe past always linger, especially when the event is a sad or tragic one. I am sorry for your pain. A beautifully written poem.  

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

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4 posted 2000-12-14 07:41 PM


Lucky~
Nothing jaded about this beautiful remembering piece.

I was particularly taken with -

'I was sitting out
on the jetty lookin' out to sea in
the black of my mind I played again
an ‘ol misery'


*Hugs*, my friend.
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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lucky
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Idaho
5 posted 2000-12-15 06:54 AM


I love you my friends,
For those who don't know this was writen for my late younger brother... He introduced the place to me... I don't know what more to say but thanks for your time this day.

Much Love... dale
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