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Elizabeth's Song [rewrite/repost 12/99]
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Elizabeth's Song [rewrite/repost 12/99] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Elizabeth's Song Here doth passed a great romanticist Seen by the very words that he kissed When speaking rhyme of candles bright That lit the darkest of this night… And maiden she would hear thy song To his side she swift ~ belonged And whispered low in shadowed light How his candelabra's song was ever bright. He took her by her maiden's hand To his ballroom now lit grand With golden stems holding forth great light And danced their dance all through this night. Phantom of time looked down upon them As he held her close in swirling spin And when she chanced to look up at him She found he'd become her dream ~ a whim. For 'twas a dream, song of which thou wrote By his very words to her heart did emote The song of dreams that could come true 'tis how a poet works, with words for you. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Tears stream down my face and words cease to flow.....beautiful is the only word I have to offer for there is no word that would do this justice...or the poet it speaks from or of~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
My this is beautiful Sunshine!! You did an eleoquent job here. Such feelings!! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, this is truly exceptional, it is purely poetic delight. I have only one thing to say this is an angels song, this is a gift so precious that it humbles me. Truly outstanding it really is Take care kid Majestic Marsha  With an imp or two |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sunshine's candalabra's light Spinning phantoms of delight Poet's hand in poet's art Paint's a picture from the heart Does not this sweet verse recall Love and beauty of it all Exquisite, dear lady Liz |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Wow !! This is great. i loved the feel of the old world and love. Love and light, Richard |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
And this poet works well, indeed! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
ohhhh, such beauty in these words...  Greeneyes **** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
beautiful sunshine.. a love fairytale poem.. nicely done.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very eloquent and well done...brought to mind a picture of a medieval Lord and Lady. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Holly, this was written months ago for two very special people here in Passions, your beautiful is dedicated to them, thank you... Ethome, not hard to find wonderful feelings around here, and I thank you for reading... Marsha, I'll share an imp with you any day...thank you little one... And to you, Lady Santos...and to you... Richard, thank you for reading... Thank you Interloper... Greeneyes...we share two things in common that I might be aware of...thank you for reading... Thank you Victoria... Elizabeth, they may very well be...on another plane...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you know that I love this one Sunshine. . . wonderful. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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