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snowpants
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0 posted 2000-12-09 08:19 PM


The world passes me by
As I sit on this bench,
Lost in my inspiration.
I’m not concerned
With the goings-on around me--
I’m rapt in this new-found world
Where you have taken me,
A world in which
Yours is the only face in focus.
Though I’ve resigned myself to being aloof,
You have reintroduced peace;
You have reached my heart.
You dared;
You succeeded at stealing
My undivided attention.
I can’t see any reason
To pay mind to the passing leaves now;
All is trivial
Except for my concentration
On your next move.
I know what I want to say,
But the words are captive in my mind.
I need to hear your voice;
You’ve been gone too long.
How could I be without
The sole rescuer of my muse?
I run down to the coast;
I don’t bother to remove my shoes.
I try to fit the pieces together,
But I can’t possibly put them back
Without the most indispensable one?
All my life,
All I’ve ever needed was the one
Who could recognize these symptoms,
Rule it a broken heart,
And begin the treatment,
En route to oblivion to the past.
So, my dearest,
Why aren’t you beside me?
Why am I the only one here,
Watching the light turn
From red to green?


'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

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SEA
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with you
1 posted 2000-12-09 08:30 PM


I can't pick a favorite part.......I loved all of this, it's wonderful!!  - SEA
Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
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2 posted 2000-12-09 08:39 PM


kris~

this is my favorite of yours yet! gosh
i seem at a loss for words...you've stolen
them it seems hehe   beautiful and honest
look at your heart and soul. you've penned
your thoughts/feelings with grace and
sincerity. truly loved this! take care

loves ya,
aim
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jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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3 posted 2000-12-09 08:46 PM


I have to agree with both of the above comments and also that I think this is your best work I've read thus far.  Wonderfully done.

jwesley

snowpants
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4 posted 2000-12-10 11:21 AM


Hey guys!  sorry it took me so long to get back to ya!

SEA:  thank you!  I am glad you like it!!  

Aims:  aww, girl. I hope yer right!  Yer the best!!     -e  ~~~~~

jwesley:  well, thank you!  That means a lot to me as this is about a very important person in my life.  Thanks!!  

sp

'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

Lady Lightning
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5 posted 2000-12-10 11:49 AM


Loved this one snowpants... Wonderful work...Hope that very important person knows how lucky they are...   ~LL~

The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown

VAS
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since 2000-11-16
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6 posted 2000-12-10 12:08 PM



This is a lovely, emotional piece.  The following lines are my favorite, I think.  So tender and sincere:

All I’ve ever needed was the one
Who could recognize these symptoms,
Rule it a broken heart,
And begin the treatment,

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Deep in the heart
7 posted 2000-12-10 12:11 PM


WOW!  And the GR8 part is the light WILL turn green  

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
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In the winds of Cherokee song
8 posted 2000-12-11 01:52 PM


If you go a running down to the coast without removing your shoes, your feet are most assuredly going to get wet my friend.  Yeah, I know, so what if it happens YET AGAIN. LOL  
Beautiful write from you and so full of the yearning of a young heart in love.  You will find the green light I am sure and when you do, don't slow down for the yellows.  Hugs and a gentle kiss just for the holidays cause I felt like it.  

A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses.
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Rosebud1229
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9 posted 2000-12-11 01:58 PM


Snowpants, beautiful,  this is really special, that's how love is, all you want is the one you love.
snowpants
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10 posted 2000-12-11 05:58 PM


LL:  thank you!  Oh, and I'd say that I'm the lucky one!  

VAS:  thanks!  glad you liked it!!  

Interloper:  thank you!  Glad to see you here!!  

Mark:  well, my friend.  You are right once again.  But, if it happens, it happens, right??     I thank you for the hug and the kiss and send them right back at ya!  (and don't worry, I didn't even THINK about slowing down for the yellows!)

Rosebud:  yes, yes, absolutely right.  all you can even think of is that special someone.  thanks!  

sp


'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me...

passing shadows
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11 posted 2005-04-22 08:39 PM


I do know this feeling
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