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Both Sides...........duet with myself
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Both Sides...........duet with myself |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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(Hey! If Doreen can write a love poem to herself, I can write a duet to me!!) I can't say I've never loved For that would not be true But I can say I've never loved Someone as I love you. I am slowly learning now that I am slowly yearning now to be with one - one special man to place my future in his hand I can't say I've never felt The flame of passion's fire But I can say I've never burned With such a strong desire. I am slowly realizing he is more than mesmerizing that he is more than just a man and he loves me like no one can I can't say I've never been Enamored by one's charms But I can say I feel safe When I am in your arms. I am slowly understanding that his presence ... so commanding never shall be so demanding but will ever be enchanting So let me say this soft and low Though loving I have been I've never loved as I love now And never will again. so...slow I may be at the start at lending you this broken heart but mend you might with love so strong and loving you will not be wrong... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is a beautiful poem and a wonderful combination of emotion. It's so lovely in structure and substance, it feels perpetual....like an evergreen. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
'deer, this is the best darned "self" duet I've ever read! I could even hear your voice rasie and octive when "She" was reading.  HeheTruly....this was great, I enjoyed it. I felt much love flow from this piece. ~Cheers ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Ahhhhh, beautiful...from both sides!! Bonnie |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Balladeer, Two thoughts, one writer and pen. You have done yourself proud this day with this writing. BC |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Smiling here ... what a visual this gave me as I pictured you reading this aloud!  Seriously though ...this was beautiful Michael. Such a lovely blend of emotions ... I really enjoyed this. If I can get this office of mine to slow down a bit ... maybe you could save me a place in line to write with you someday too.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
My goodness, do we have a split personality or what? This came across so lovingly...a lilt and tilt in time engaged the senses... this is beautiful 'Deer...she must be someone very special...and if she is just fantasy...then you need to pen a book I think... well done, Sir Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Giggling with delight* yes, you did this with wonderful style. How very well done is this poem. I have learned to expect the very best of love from your pen and you have not disappointed me in any way. Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
When I saw the title, I thought of the scene in Finian's Rainbow where the one lady is singing the duet with the leprechaun, and her fiance hears them, and he asks her what she is doing and she says, "I'm singing a duet." The fiance is like, "With who?" and she replies, "With myself." Anyway, Balladeer, enjoyable read! I liked the way it went back and forth. Good work. |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
I'd have to agree with Irie. Definitely the best'self duet' I ever read. This one is really something... "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
yes you may and yes you can...you may write anything you want ... especially if its something so special and heart touching as this. very creative ... and so romantic and sincere... we all hope to hear this song at least once in our life... wonderful writing ... and ya know this one goes in the ohhowilovewhenyouwritelikethis file later-swoon me to the moon-gator jm I looked into the sky for my anthem The words and music came through But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen Looking into you |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"Can't love another till you love yerself"... for sure... You're singing a superb duet here, m'deer... I likes it muchly...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mike, Well what can I say after what has been said? Your poems will chime a long time. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Balladeer! Yep, beautiful! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Balladeer~ You can speak for me - anytime ! This is so thoughtfully loving and creatively unique. *smiles* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
[shhh...don't mind me...I just forgot to hit the darn library button...] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
great duet........love it. Charisma |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
As always, I am in awe of YOUR creativity, o noble mentor! And I too, enjoyed the visual of your changing persona as you wrote. The student here has but one question: er, which end is up? ROFL... Love to my talented friend...I'm ever watching and learning from you! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I'm in awe alright, I think you both should be on Social Security Disability and well deserving of a CHECK..! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i'm glad that you can love yourself! i'm glad i love me, too! when love is love is love is love, ( as a very much unknown poet once said ) then what else can you do? (*wink* hehe) i wrote myself a love pome once, i know you said you knew -- but didn't put a voice in there from someone else, it's true the style inside these lines you wrote seems passionate and novel! in fact, the words which you have penned just might make someone grovel! i find that often, i will talk to myself, just like you do. but love is love, you know, my friend, so what the heck can i do? when someone loved is far away, sometimes we must be centered -- split personalities may rise from doors which can't be entered....lol on that note, i will simply say, there's nothing wrong with Oedipus! so you love you and i'll love me, we can't see what's ahead up us!  (er, i mean "ahead of us"... geesh... it's hard sometimes, isn't it? to rhyme completely with every syllable... *sigh*... anyway, great poem, Mr. Balladeer!... please forgive my answer in rhyme but, hey!! YOU inspire sometimes, y'know?) - all you can ever really ask out of life is a sincere apology and some decent poetry - |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Sheesh, Maybe it's me that needs that CHECK...$$$$$$ Is there realy a Balladeer or a Pearl Peri... It was somrthin' I was Just-a-thinkin'... LOL... Love you guys... Love the rhymes... I guess I love to guess. dale . |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Balladeer--This is the way it should be...and I love you for loving you!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Rose...thank you! Love IS evergreen! Irie..very perceptive! I crossed my legs when typing her part. Thank you!!Bonnie....both sides thank you Bill...your approval is always appreciated. Kit....my dear, there are few people I admire more than you. Say the word and we do it. That would be great!!! sunshine...than I don't need to pen a book I'm very glad you enjoyed startime...thank you! I will do my best not to disappoint... Elizabeth...I'll have to tell the leprechaun the jig's up!  Thank you, my friend Angel...thank you. SOmetimes you just have to duet yourself! Janet Marie...I'm sure you have heard this song before....if not, I can sing pretty well Nan..you kidding? I'm suing myself for alimony!! Sy...what can you say? How about "Go ahead and raise my price? That's ok" ?? LOL! Denise....yes, you are!!!! Marge...I DO speak for you...and howl and beg and plead....you send me to nunneries! Charisma...I'm very glad you like it serenity...which end is up? You, my dear, may always have your choice lucky...thank you for reading. Doreen...what a trip you are! The Eveready Bunny...how you can shoot these fantastic pieces out! I wanna be like you when I grow up! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
'Deer, don't be shy, just say what's in your heart Loved it.Dee I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Oh, phooey! phooey! phooey! i got my reference wrong! Oedipus is not the one who loves himself so long! i SHOULD have said, please love yourself just like the Great Narcissus! he needed none, nobody else-- and he would never miss us! oh DRAT! of BLAST! oh DARN! oh MY! this error's undefensible! i think i'll hide again from here! this is quite reprehensible! forgive me, 'Deer, for i did err, my reference was absurd! before i answer you in verse, i should look up the word!!! (so you wanna be like me when you grow up? you like Peter Pan, too? lol) |
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