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My Sweetest Friend

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Effigy
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0 posted 12-07-2000 02:14 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Effigy


I have been
under you.
Loving you,
neglecting me.
I have been
behind your back,
in that dark
I knew so well.

I was once your
sweetest angel, your
shining friend.
I had it all
and everything
Till the melodyís end.

Then the music stopped
and the people left.
I was the only one,
only one around.
Left dancing with memories
of a forgotten kiss.

Now Iím trapped,
a long lost memory.
A darkened part of your past,
you canít erase.

In Your mind
You canít forget.
Forget that rainy day
You had left me
Along the way.

© Copyright 2000 Effigy - All Rights Reserved
Wobbly Head Bob
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1 posted 12-07-2000 03:54 PM       View Profile for Wobbly Head Bob   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wobbly Head Bob

I know this theme all too well, my friend.  And you point out that memories remain on both ends, and no one forgets, I like that.  Hearts don't really break, they just bend a little...the hurt is all the same, nice writing.
Effigy
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2 posted 12-07-2000 09:23 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Effigy

Thanks.
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3 posted 12-07-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

This brought the tears to my eyes and re-opened an ache for my once best friend, I still miss him so much...... excellent write  -SEA
Irish Rose
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4 posted 12-08-2000 09:42 AM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

No true friend should ever be forgotten, or neglected....such sorrowful words

What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life.

Walt Whitman


Effigy
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5 posted 12-08-2000 12:34 PM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Effigy

SEA- I'm sorry I would never want to do anything to bring tears to your eyes. I'm a bad bad boy.

I.R.- You are so right.


  

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Aimster
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6 posted 12-09-2000 03:34 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Effigy~

so honest and full of pain. enjoyed the
read though immensly...keep writing dear
poet, the pain in time begins to ease.

take care.
~amy~
forne_marin
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7 posted 05-07-2004 10:31 AM       View Profile for forne_marin   Email forne_marin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit forne_marin's Home Page   View IP for forne_marin

I'm going to use a terrible word, and it's "nice". This poem is nice. I enjoyed it. It had a nice sense of melancholy and came off as not too terrible sappy.

For a love poem, this wasn't so bad, but you and I both know you can do much better.

I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry.

Effigy
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8 posted 05-08-2004 11:29 AM       View Profile for Effigy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Effigy

Well comeon give me a break. You know it's not my real style.
 
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